You are really shaking it up! 

Keep up the performance to the max, you are going for acme.

okay - it isn't bad ( obviously, you got 14th in august )
i would say its a little sloppy - don't get me wrong, you have some skill here sometimes your voice just sounds sour, only for a moment here and there.
i love the progression.

I like the groove of the guitar & the voice.

hehe, i'm not sure if there's a place to post stuff like this on the forum or not.. i've been so removed from bandamp recently, so ... anyway, here it is (i think)

i have no guitar within 100 miles of me, so i'm trying to remember this from 8 months ago when i last played the song.  and the rythm is pretty wacky, so you'll have to listen closely to the music, because it'll be impossible to denote the rhythm just by typing it out

(standard tuning, all strings 1/2 step flat)

the intro is the same as the chorus:

(the -> means slide up to the next number quickly)
(an X means to either mute that string, or somehow NOT hit it)


X   X   5   2 -> 3   0
X   3   5   2 -> 3   3
2   0   0   0        2
0   2   4   1 -> 2   0
2   0   0   0        0
0   0   0   0        0


then the verse.  the verse is in three parts.  each part is a mutation of the last.  all three parts start and end with the same position

in addition, the beginning of each verse (there's only two verses in the song right now) there's a slight lead into the three parts.  so, here's the lead:


X   X  
X   X  
X   4  
2   2  
2   0  
0   0  


k, so now here's part 1:


X   X   X   X   X   X
X   X   X   X   X   X
X   X   X   X   X   X
5   X   X   X   0   2
3   3   5   2   3   3
0   3   5   0   X   X


note: the last positions, go back and forth a few times, so listen to the music.. hopefully you can catch it.  neither one is played very long.

part 2

X   X   X   X   X   X   X
X   X   X   X   X   X   X
X   X   X   X   X   X   X
5   X   X   X   X   0   2
3   3   2   3   2   3   3
0   3   0   3   0   X   X


part 3

X   X   X   X   X   X
X   X   X   X   X   X
X   X   X   X   X   X
5   X   X   X   0   2
3   3   3   2   3   3
0   3   0   0   X   X


note: the 4th position on part 3 is held for a long time, with lots of strumming, and THEN goes into the last two positions like normal.

how's that?  if you've got any questions, it may be best to simply listen to the song over and over again   it's terribly hard to explain it with words :P

best of luck to you!

Really nice song, reminds me of Dashboard confessional, or something like that. The only thing i could point out to modify is the vocals during the chorus( over and over...same team), should sing it with  more power, think it would sound nice. Anyways awesome song, really like it.

Lovely song...I'm just not keen on the arrangement.
The lyrics are wonderful and I like the chord structure but I'd like to hear a version with a few more instruments behind it.
I appreciate that you were hurrying 'to get it all in' (as it says in the lyrics) but it ends up sounding a little like you were desperate to get to the end. When rushed the lyrics lose a lot of their meaning and that's a massive thing for this song.
I love the fact that you aren't scared of writing lines (lyrically) of different lengths, and don't fall into the cliches of every line in a song having to have the same melody.
Overall though...nice song man

that was awsome! it was fast, good rythem, and a good tune. nice job

*lurves* I really love this! fab!