A cheap song about a cheap stripper....

Awesome intro, dude. The grittiness of it reminds of the old White Stripes stuff.

My only complaint is that the song (mainly the guitar) gets a bit repetitive after a while. I think you could shorten it or mix it up a bit to make the song more interesting.

But other than that, pretty good.

Yeah, it gets a bit dull... I was practicing on how to write bass and drum songs, obviously rather simple...
And I only took a couple of hours on it, which is also obvious...
These songs posted are rather old...
I uploaded it to see if it's even worth doing again...
Thanks for the comment...

Most definitely worth doing again, perhaps with some slightly cleaner guitar during the main verses, and you need some kind of synth stuff in there to fill it out a bit... nothing too dramatic, a cheap casio keyboard would do the trick...

               JimK

Some guitar riffs would also fill it out, perhaps get a warmer distorted guitar sound, it doesn't need much else as your voice really makes the song!!!

It's a good foundation to work on, you should definatly work on these recent songs you've uploaded.

Cheers

Denis

This needs cow bells and mad 'jumpy' instrument like that !
I like your style anyway Jack, this is no exception, you're an artist dude, I love your innovative ideas.
Lyrics also top style!
That last bit , "can I call you Baby" done a bit weak but the rest is really cool.