One man, one mic, one take. Just six chords with some arpeggios made up as the song progressed, lyrics also made up as the song progressed, save the few lines I had in my head before I started recording.



Edit:


Lyrics down two posts,
A version where the vocals and guitar were done in seperate takes...
http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5775.html

I like the guitar chords and most of the arpeggios. Not bad for improvisation. The vocals are a whole different story.

Not trying to sound rude or anything, but I'm not going to say it's beautiful either or else you won't improve. Your voice lacks total pitch control. Almost every note you hit was completely out of key and clashed with the guitar. Can't say anything about the lyrics because I couldn't really understand them.

Lwt mw liaten through and type the lyrics

Ladies and gentlemen
I'd like to tell you a story
About a boy, who lost his voice

I think you've heard it before...........


Listen to his soul
Listen to his scream, Hear his pain
Hear him bleed

Angels would cry,
at least we know they should
hes learning to play (Supost to be sing)
Through a box of wood (This was the only word that I didn't like my pronucation of.)

Don't look at him
He is just a kid
But he knows more about life
then I ever did

The story begins
with something he played for an hour
Something he wrote to
impress his father

What is a kid
without a dream
He grew up to see
Absolutely nothing

Just smiles and nods
He can't even speak
Some people say
He's just a freak

Then he plays
Screams from his hands
Everyone who hears him
understands

That a tongue is nothing
Inconsequential
You've heard it before,
the stories eternal

Lisen to him scream
Listen to him play (Supost to be sing, again)
from the box of wood that he
found in the basement

Oh, so afraid.

I have to agree with this guy. You are a good guitarist though.

I love the ideas

The Lyrics are really cool

Your voice tone sounds better on the lower register. it sought of remindeds me of Dire Dtraits.
There are quite a few famous artists who don't necessarily have a good vocal range, but great projection
& presentation. It would be great if you could try it bro, I think it would be awesome!!

Rated

Denis