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#1August 18th, 2011 · 04:07 PM
32 threads / 28 songs
201 posts
United States of America
Oh, My Mind
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Please vote for this song !
Current votes: 7 (needs min. 15)
It’s in the battle 2011-09


Kind of a day-dreaming song. Written about a collection of memories, mostly from high school I suppose. Tried for a bit of a happier, more up-beat feeling than my usual stuff.

Feedback on the song, lyrics, or mixing/recording is welcome! I'm still a good bit away from the next CD-release, so lots of time to work on feedback I receive.

Lyrics
Grey fisted clouds in the sky. Plaid skirt and innocent eyes,
And I am no longer sane.
Small road, stop sign ahead. Slow intersection. Big hotel bed.
Oh, my mind seems to have drifted away.

If you call for me I'll know this is a dream,
And as stupid as it seems- I'll wake.

Bright blue sky all around. Cows on the highways and fire on the ground.
And I've come here but I don't know why.
Misguided grasp on the truth. Gold and silver but nothing for you.
I have better things in mind.

Don't reach for me. Things are never what they seem.
I'd kiss you if I could but it'd only be a dream.
And don't call my name from any other state,
As pointless as it seems- I'd wake.

Oh, my mind. My mind.

Broom handle twins in the sky.
Two pairs of mean little eyes.

If you hold onto me I'll know this is a dream.
Invite me in your room and I won't stay asleep.
If your behavior should change, I'll know that it's fake
And though I won't want to,
Though I'll fight to stay,
Though it's unfair- I'll wake.

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#2August 18th, 2011 · 04:41 PM
77 threads / 59 songs
920 posts
Netherlands
nice mood, nice everything, this must be the easiest review ever for me :p
simply dont reach this level myself so i just wanted to say i love the song, and production too
doesnt sound happy to me though, no need for anyway
listened 3 times with pleasure but will it last longer i wonder?
maybe a break thingie would be nice? or a build up to something exciting
(excuse my english pls)
welcome anyway
Max
#3August 18th, 2011 · 04:43 PM
32 threads / 28 songs
201 posts
United States of America
Thanks :)
Thanks Max! 
I did say "happier" than my usual stuff, which is not to say that it's "happy" ...

I'll give your suggestions some thought. See if I can't extend the song a bit without it feeling tacked-on. Thanks again!
#4August 18th, 2011 · 05:22 PM
77 threads / 59 songs
920 posts
Netherlands
LOL

i guess its easier to just say it then to achieve such a thing,
it def has to get better from it and that might be difficult, but if it does , you win
hope it works
#5August 18th, 2011 · 06:58 PM
340 threads / 59 songs
4,344 posts
United Kingdom
So how long do you intend trying to fit into the category 'indi music' ?

That was exceptionally good

Still is...I'm also on thirds ..
It's so well made, orchestrated to a formula, I can imagine it taking you very far.

Cheers for uploading
#6August 18th, 2011 · 08:03 PM
32 threads / 28 songs
201 posts
United States of America
@kings - I'm not sure if you're being sarcastic or kind, but if it's kind, then thank you.

As for me trying to "fit into" indie... I'm not sure what you mean. I'm a 1-man band. All of my music is recorded in a bedroom studio in my apartment, mixed by me, and distributed on CDs that I burn myself (or on a website that I pay $10/month to host). I think I'm "indie" because I have no funding (and no fan-base, really. Look me up on YouTube and see how few views my music has.)

I suppose I'll remain "indie" as long as no one's really listening to me. lol
#7August 18th, 2011 · 11:04 PM
92 threads / 12 songs
893 posts
United States of America
First of all, welcome to Bandamp! Second this is amazing! The production is crisp, the mix seems perfect - your vocals are truly fine, the lyric content is compelling. Nice punchy rhythm. The whole song sounds very professional in its presentation. I can find nothing that needs "fixing". I don't know why you're not on regular airplay. Anyway, I look forward to hearing more of your stuff!
#8August 19th, 2011 · 05:33 AM
117 threads / 27 songs
1,057 posts
Germany
Welcome to this lil community, Brian.
IŽm totally impressed by this debut. Congrats.
I just can repeat what "Catty", kings and others posted before.
This is a perfect composed, performed and produced song. I guess that youŽre still pretty young though your songwriting- producing skills sound very experienced, mature, adult (sorry for my denglish). 

Here on bandamp youŽll find a few more "livingroom-one-man-band-producers" . So, welcome to the "single club".  

U.L.I.
#9August 19th, 2011 · 08:55 AM
32 threads / 28 songs
201 posts
United States of America
Thanks so much for the kinds words and the warm welcome, U.L.I. and "Catty" ( )
#10August 19th, 2011 · 07:17 PM
51 threads / 33 songs
292 posts
Canada
Cool song! Not much to critique from me, except the fact that I would REALLY like to hear an acoustic version of this!

Great work!

    --XFactor--
#11August 20th, 2011 · 05:50 AM
188 threads / 27 songs
2,825 posts
Germany
no comment but high vote


ehm... btw....

cool song, great production, wonderful composition, pretty voice
#12August 21st, 2011 · 01:11 PM
5 threads / 5 songs
102 posts
Suriname
good quality man! and nice voice!!
#13August 22nd, 2011 · 08:42 AM
32 threads / 28 songs
201 posts
United States of America
Thanks all for the kind comments. Very encouraging to read.

An acoustic version, eh, XFactor? I'll keep that in mind. I don't often re-do originals as acoustic versions but sometimes it's fun. (If I could get someone else to do the drumming.)
#14August 22nd, 2011 · 08:50 AM
32 threads / 28 songs
201 posts
United States of America
I just noticed that my song says something about being in a battle, and a lot of the other ones I'm listening to... don't. I wonder what kind of battle I accidentally entered when I posted this first one... lol 
#15August 22nd, 2011 · 10:15 AM
15 threads / 14 songs
91 posts
Malaysia
I usually won't like too pop-ish songs like this but

hahahaha it's so funny XD.

Ya and very good quality. How you you get those sounds? Do you use VSTs?
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