AnnaJo wrote…

I really like this, it's a good song, well put together and you've got a great voice - quite often when I listen to 'amateur' tracks it seems to be the singing that lets the song down, but that's not the case with you.  I guess my criticism would be that for me, it's all very much on one level, the instrumentation doesn't really change and there's no dynamic contrast between verses and choruses etc.  The harmony helps there, but if it was me, i'd want a bit of change in the song somewhere, a change in the guitar or drum part or a moment of quiet, even if it was very brief, just to break it up a bit.

swordfish wrote…

Good song................Critique'''''
Beautifully recorded....................but poor mix.....................drums sound as if in the garden next door......vocals very well done..............push the guitars back a bit..................and let something else happen..............no hook here to lock me into what is essentially a pop song..............chorus where?
1:47 'find me in the corner' seems like it could be a chorus lurking in the lyric----------this could add length to the song and reduce need of repeated guitar strumming . The end of the song is weak

some help i hope

uve got a hit here

gets my vote v good