#1November 13th, 2006 · 04:22 PM
115 threads / 18 songs
1,414 posts
United States of America
Excalibur Would Be Nice
I know this is a long lyric set, but just read it all.  The 2 outtro pieces are similar to extended choruses.  They share a melody.  They're much higher and engergetic, so the song sort of kicks into gear on the "Cut you down" part in the (Interjection).  The two verses also share a seperate melody from the Outtro pieces.

This is written for the piano, currently, but one day after I actually get to make a good recording, I want to arrange a full band version that kicks in on the same "Cut you down" part.

XO, TLS

"Excalibur Would Be Nice"

(verse 1)
A magic wave, spells of indignation
A feeling--a fire--within,
tugs on my imagination
It says that you've done nothing wrong,
and maybe it's my fault,
for staring so longingly at you
But you know deep inside
That the way you've acted
well,
you oughtta lose sleep tonight

(chorus)
These fairy tales are just too far out
of reach for my grasp on reality
And wouldn't that be nice,
if you could find a way to disappear,
and entrust your luck to that figure in the mirror?
Leave your fights at home
Leave your fights at home

(verse 2)
A tear escapes to think that you would do this.
A sigh behind closed doors,
won't fall on anyone's ears
Which means that, once again, I'm back to searching.
Hopefully this time,
I'll find something sharper...
Something that'll make history
for every other poor subdivided heart out there

(repeat chorus)

(interjection)
I've got a lovesick mind that says:
You've done nothing wrong,
and maybe it's my fault--
But is it wrong that I wanna cut you down?
Cut you down
Cut you down
Cut you down

(outtro piece 1)
Just leave your fights at home
I never wanted to own your ability to think
And I thought you knew better
And I wish it was you,
who was standing on the streetside,
in the pouring rain,
waiting for an angel
And wouldn't that be nice,
if you could find a way to disappear,
and entrust your luck to that figure in the mirror?
Leave your fights at home
Leave your fights at home

(bridge)
I've got this jewel you missed,
in the shape of my heart,
and you can't see through it,
to see these motivating factors
in all of this.
I wanted you--
I wanted you to fall in love with not just anyone

(outtro piece 2)
Just leave your fights at home,
because you're never alone.
It's no tragedy to think,
you'll realize that you're no better
And I wish it was you
who was standing on the outside,
you poor inconsiderate--
I'll cut you down
And wouldn't that be nice,
if you could find a way to disappear,
and send us your luck,
instead of keeping it in your dresser drawer
Best of luck to you--
Leave your fights at home
#2November 16th, 2006 · 02:07 PM
118 threads / 55 songs
3,086 posts
Netherlands
quite complex set of lyrics you got there mr TLS, complex, but intelligible. Takes a few reads to get into them, and right then they open like the storyline of a good book, the detailed elaborating in disappointment over one failing love affair, the search for cause and reason, - a lot of history attached: "I wanted you to fall in love with not just anyone" - the very core of these lyrics. And the aggression, the will to put the agonizing doubts down to the ground forgood: as they are associated to thus personify as the 2nd person: cut you down, cut you down...

Very well worded... I can relate to them (quite a generic muse after all )

When will you be able to record/upload some music again?
#3November 17th, 2006 · 12:09 PM
46 threads / 33 songs
179 posts
United States of America
(I am lying on the ground worshipping the computer screen, need I say more)
#4November 17th, 2006 · 09:23 PM
30 threads
169 posts
United States of America
wide eyed ambition...
as opposed to blind ambition. This is an ambitious undertaking, and you are on your way to pulling it together. Good job. It is waiting for your music. I can't wait to hear it.
#5November 18th, 2006 · 05:37 AM
24 threads
319 posts
Malaysia
omg these are the most genius, beautiful set of lyrics i've read so far!!!!1


gotta hear the song man...
#6November 20th, 2006 · 12:38 PM
115 threads / 18 songs
1,414 posts
United States of America
shoot, i typed this once, but it screwed up and didn`t post 

so, thanks for the comments

i`ll be recording again in october of 07.  i simply won`t have the ability to until then.  sorry!  these are my favorite lyrics to sing when nobody`s around    i`m dying to put more up, but they`re not perfect yet, so i don`t want to delude their presence by posting fragmented songs.

thanks again

XO
#7November 20th, 2006 · 12:42 PM
9 threads
75 posts
United States of America
Hey!
This song is awesome. I would love to here music to it! It kicks my songs ass!
#8December 7th, 2007 · 03:23 PM
115 threads / 18 songs
1,414 posts
United States of America
Okay, so... I've finally finished my first recording of this.  Check it out here:  http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5821.html

just thought i'd let you all know.
#9December 7th, 2007 · 05:33 PM
76 threads / 5 songs
529 posts
Cook Islands
amazing!
Although I had to re-read a few times
smacked me in the face a few times too!
...I'm speechless
Great job

gonna take a listen now ^_^
#10December 9th, 2007 · 05:26 PM
30 threads
169 posts
United States of America
finally
I love these, always have. But I don't like the music. I wrote a scathing review in the music forum. Just wanted to know that in this forum, I'm still a big fan!

Also wanted to say that while I relate to the lyrics, maybe I just don't relate to the genre you recorded it for, in which case you can disregard that review.
#11June 24th, 2012 · 04:35 AM
115 threads / 18 songs
1,414 posts
United States of America
My player's shuffle brought me to my recording of this song tonight, and I have to say that I'm surprised at how much I really love the lyrics, and I enjoyed the music when I wrote it.

But that being said, I don't really like the way I mashed the two of them together.  I made compromises on both in the name of finally making a recording of something.

I need to re-architect this song one of these days.  I just really like the words, and I feel like maybe they're close to wasted in the present form.
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