A couple of weeks ago I posted a song called "waiting for" (http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/6106.html) which was very rough and had a lot of mix and mastering to be done.  I decided to start from scratch and came up with a fairly different sounding track but I wasn't happy with the lyrics and vocals. To try and sort this out I started again with an even more stripped down version of the song but it took on a life of its own. Nothing seemed to work right until eventually about half an hour ago a new tune and lyric was born. guitar is fairly roughly patched together and vocal is very "off" because its so new but I thought I would see what people think.

Yeah I can hear where the two are related. I can't tell whether or not the vocals in this would fill what I was getting bored with on the last track because this is lacking the depth of the other effects.

I am not offended with your vocals, and you said yourself you threw this togather rapidly. That being said, apparently I can't really distinguish between bad and so-so vocals. I can only distinguish between great and not great. I am hopeing that your vocals are on the high-side of not great because I like them.

Guitar: I think that the chords part ~1.10-1.50 is pretty strong.

All in all this is a pretty crazy bit of awesomeness.







Why do you have 30 seconds of silence at the end?

Peace.

This way of creating works for you, so just go with the flow and what works for you.

With me I'll just try out different things until I play phrase that sound nice or interesting, then build from that,
There is no point trying to work on something that doesn't sound right to you as an artist, you must be happy with it.

Anyway back to the this song, I love the guitar progression and playing, the vox melody is nice too, just need to project your vox out a bit and this would be a great song.

So maybe on your next song you create you could start playing this tune and see where it takes you.

Cheers

Denis

u have a nice voice lovely..............
this is great and very well done...........
the voc needs a little seperation from the guitar
maybe a little lift on the voc eq???
or drop the guitar a touch............
a song is about the words ......so bring them forward please

fish

love the sound

kersplash