Lots to fix but sounds ok through my headphones but crap through my speakers. Hoping that its my speakers that are crap!

As you say lots to fix - the vocal is lost, the drums are too far up in the mix making it sound too busy but a careful remix should sort it out. some nice stuff going on if you could only hear it.  I reckon this has the makings of something a lot better and would encourage you to persevere. Keep her lit!!

Yes I completely agree with cosmo here. Great stuff going on, just needs to be remixed and cleared up a bit.
Keep working on it!

Just a little flat on vox and snare, like the song. Very nice.

Denis