That sounded pretty good man! I can't really comment on the techincal stuff but I will comment on what I hear. I really like the sound of this song, nice and simple. When it is put with other instruments and effects it will be pretty awesome. Couldn't help but to feel that you were holding back a bit on the vocals at the chorus. That may just be the music overshadowing a bit though. So, kick it up a notch on the chorus and i am loving it!

 Can't wait to hear the finsihed version