So, I've changed the title of this song in the end, which before was "He Parts, She Parts... We Part."

For starters, I'll have you know that this song has come a long way    The music from this song has existed in my head since before the "Actually" song.  (In fact, if you refer to the first [Actually] post that I made a few years back, I even made a comment somewhere about how I had put another project aside in order to work on [Actually].)

Aspirations

You hang your head low,
he walks away
This was the same thing you were told, like last time.
They say 'God'll love you,'
but to us it's more like he was searching our insides for someone else.

No sleep last night,
I thought of this--
it was the last thing I saw coming:
(and I'm not sure I'll ever see you again)
'Sometimes we live, but baby sometimes we listen.'

Your father's screaming
Baby, he knows something we don't.
Your mother's sobbing
Somebody once told me,
'You just don't know what it takes.'
And you know what?
I think Somebody was right.

I came to play this game,
it buried me
I'm just no good at this or anything.
We thought that this was it,
so we felt so safe
But they're so far ahead that it looks that we've been doing everything alone.
I came to play,
this buried me
and I'm no good at anything
Take me to the places where you felt most safe,
like the empty spaces of your heart

But this is what we get for pulling and forcing Love to take the helm.

I'm not so sure I'll ever see you again,
in this part of town,
in this kind of weather
What did you expect from me?
Just leave me with my regrets and solemn reasons for not doing what we promised.

Your father's screaming
Baby, he knows something we don't.
Your mother's sobbing
Somebody once told me,
'You just don't know what it takes.'
And you know what?
I think Somebody was right.

I came to play this game,
it buried me
I'm just no good at this or anything.
We thought that this was it,
so we felt so safe
But they're so far ahead that it looks that we've been doing everything alone.
I came to play,
this buried me
and I'm no good at anything
Take me to the places where you felt most safe,
like the empty spaces of your heart

But this is what we get for pulling and forcing Love to take the helm.

But I never saw London with you.
(Sometimes we live, but baby sometimes we listen.)
And I never saw London with you.
We just want to leave this town,
and get away from all these lives
Since-ended stories are just plain and boring
You hang your head down, I walk away
Maybe one day, one day...
I'll go.

This is really cool....  I like the flow of the lyrics...  Very different, works well....  The lyrics are cool...   Very abstract and yet tells the story well....  I like it....  Not exactly one of my favorite styles, but I must say, I enjoyed listening to this....  Very well done.... 

              JimK

You Have a great Live perfomer feel, I can feel your excitment and energy coming through..

Well Done keep it up.

Will Rate

Cheers

Denis

I like this song.

You use vocal harmonies really well!



I don't think this one is as good as "Actually, Sorry..", but it's still good .

I think the ending was pretty good.

I agree with Denis about having a "live performer" feel.  I like everything here.  Although it could use a few more layers in my opinion.  Something to thicken it up a bit, but overall this is pretty damn nice!

any suggestions on what you'd like to hear in some extra layers?  i'd love any ideas.  the easiest thing to add is a piano, since that's my next best instrument, but i can leave this up to discussion :P

thanks for the replies!

TLS

Man you have a real good voice.You have a unique vocal timber and song witting style.IMO is borderline acoustic progressive.Theres is a lot going on vocal wise but I think it goes well with your multiple changes!!
Good job!
M.

Your voice fits your music/style well. Your timing is right on spot. nice harmony also. Guitar sounds tight...Nice little story line you have in the song/lyrics...And I like the idea of incorporating a story line into a song  creating a picture for the listener as the song is being listened to .........I think that's a very important aspect
nice work

Flyer

Will Rate This

hmm..
interesting...
liked it..
dont wanna comment as i am not muchinto this field of music..

but really nice..!

we like a good acoustic track.... very emo

This is pretty good .. nice guitar tone love the layered vocals sounds.. I like the tone of your voice overall but it seems that you go off pitch (flat) in a couple of spots. 

Overall this is pretty good and kinda of experimental  style to me.        progressive emo ? 

gets good vote

sounds good the vocals and rythm match very well.