another first take on a new song please let me know if it's worth working on it

I like this already...please do continue on this project Vincent...Just what do you want to continue to do ?
nice recording...vox is right up front where it should be...the guitar is smooth and it sounds good... love the chord progression
damn good lyrics..your vocals are right on ...Nice job on that also( would you mind posting them I like to follow them with the song )I'm going to add this one to my playlist..I like Blues music ...love it as a matter of fact..and yes...I LIKE YOUR SONG

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Yes Yes Yes! Your a star Vince, what a lovely song, simply lovely! 
Love your words and you put them together so well, a real good story, and you sing so well too.
This is a kind of song people who know it will sing along to, I would have liked to have heard a few more "And maybe you like my song"s towards the end, because it is very 'singable to' !!

As I said this was a first take and I agree with King the end is far too short
I will rework all that for the more final version as soon as I can get an afternoon off from my children and have proper recording time

I absolutely love this.  As I stated in the lyrics, the simplicity of this is what does it for me.  The chord progression is fantastic.  I don't have my guitar on me, so could you post the chord progression?

Edit: that was a piss poor critique.  Here's something more constructive:

The vocals are great, but they seem dull (in terms of tone) compared to the sparkling clarity of the guitar---I don't know if this is a recording issue or whatever, but that could probably be fixed via EQ.

I'd also like to hear maybe a tambourine, shaker or bongos---any similarly simple hand percussion instrument would work---to add some texture to the sound.

I agree about the end.

Fantastic work though,!

No worries, I got it.  Ukulele did it.

Are you gonna put a ukulele on the track?
Excellent!
Can't wait to hear your version
your right about the sound on the voice it's pretty dull but as I said it was a one take job with no eq no mix just plug in and play!
I just put this version on to see how the feedback would be and I will upload a better version(hopefully) very soon with two guitar and more instruments(percussions and bass) probablyt hank for the constructives comments

No, I wasn't going to put a ukulele on the track, I meant I used a uke to figure out the chord progression.  My uke died over the summer sitting in storage; terrible tragedy.

I'm looking forward to seeing a more rounded off version of this.

I hope you're gonna upload your version avi I'd love to hear it!

MaP promised a video for that one!
Can't wait

Love this track.Great music writing skills and music thematic.Nothing really here to better except maybe a bit of mastering!

Awesome job!
M.