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#1June 4th, 2007 · 08:08 PM
50 threads / 12 songs
305 posts
United States of America
On Mute Today
Please vote for this song !
Current votes: 9 (needs min. 15)
It’s in the battle 2007-06

Not a final version, but VOTE FOR IT ANYWAY. I realllyyy appreciate feedback.

Yes, I know I was horribly offkey on the intro verse, just keep listening. Try not to cringe too much :P

Verses and bridges: [G D E C]suspended
Chorus: [G Am C D]suspended


I think I'm on mute today
I try so hard, but I don't know what to say
I found something I wanted
But it looks like something's too far away
Feels like she's in my grasp but I know
this feeling won't last

I think I'm alone today
And it seems to me
That everyone ignores what I say
Just someone by my side
Thats enough for me to be alright, okay

I want someone that can hear
I want a girl that can be sincere
I guess I'll be her guy
I hope I'll get never have to say goodbye

I wonder, what I can be
I wonder, whats in store for me
I'm thinking about how this will end
And I'm wondering how it will start again

(bridge variation)
I want someone that can see
I want a girl that feels like me
I guess I'll be her guy
I hope I'll get never have to say goodbye

(bridge variation)

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#2June 4th, 2007 · 08:20 PM
3 threads / 3 songs
11 posts
United States of America
the guitar is sounding nice.....the voice isn't so great but isn't bad either just keep practicing man....keep up the good work.
#3June 4th, 2007 · 08:30 PM
157 threads / 30 songs
1,952 posts
United States of America
real nice song very cool
I like the lyrics alot...... nice guitar sound and playing... you already hear what you need to fix.....I would continue on with this and redo the vocals .... I saw a thing on tv that said in one session the prodiucer of  (mariah carey's) the cd , has her sing the song 8 times each line  Then they try to get the best one out of those 8 takes...that's after she has worked her a$$ off learning it before hand.

This is such a good song and you played it so well ..imho I think you should work on the vocals more and redo them. 

very good song.
#4June 4th, 2007 · 08:40 PM
50 threads / 12 songs
305 posts
United States of America
At the moment my sound card kinda died (novice at recording + cheap soundcard = kablooey!)

I'm working with a girl/vocalist and a indie label guy that's helping us for free so pooled together we'lkl have some real nice mixers and 4 or 5 mics and such, so we'll have an albums worth by the end of the summer.

#5June 4th, 2007 · 09:30 PM
65 threads / 2 songs
1,062 posts
United States of America
I agree with whats been said before...  Guitar work is showing alot of promise.  The vocals lack confidence and clarity, but that comes with time.  Keep it up, man.
#6June 4th, 2007 · 10:53 PM
48 threads / 7 songs
429 posts
United States of America
YAY! your guitar playing is WONDERFULL! yay! im so happy i could dance. this is one of my fave songs written by you dont be so shy when you sing alittle more practice on that but it shows promiss, this song is great its so sweet. you did such a great job on this. lyrics kinda remind me of something educated guess wmight wright. good job kid u made me proud
#7June 4th, 2007 · 11:28 PM
127 threads / 43 songs
2,808 posts
Puerto Rico
This is an awesome song.Work on the vocals an you have a hit.The lyrics are great!!Gets good vote.
#8June 5th, 2007 · 08:38 AM
64 threads / 13 songs
669 posts
United States of America
Confidence, son, confidence.

Well written and arranged.

Sing loud like no one's listening.
#9June 5th, 2007 · 05:27 PM
37 threads / 19 songs
618 posts
United States of America
Listen to Avinashv!!!
he said it as good as I could have... sing like
you're in the shower all by yourself... there's
a little lesson I learned as a child and keep
trying to pound into you children's brains!!!
if you sing loud and with confidence!! if
you sing loud enough to hear the mistakes
then you can fix them.... if you don't sing
loud enough, you forget them and when
it comes time to preform then for others,
you make the same mistakes over and over..
 we discussed it in chat, but just to remind
you, that first opening phrase needs a little
 but over all it's killer bro!! great song,
great composition..

Danny - Blueyes
#10June 5th, 2007 · 06:44 PM
151 threads / 150 songs
265 posts
United States of America
Good voice (good for the emo era anyway  ). Well played, excellent chord structure, melody fits.

Well composed, well played.

Your voice could be louder in the mix and you could sing more confidentley as well.
#11June 7th, 2007 · 05:25 AM
2 threads / 1 songs
5 posts
Nice guitar
I really like the guitar and the whole way the song is built up....I could imagine a better voice but musst say there are a few tips that any professional singer would give that can help anybody to sing really great!
you might want to look into something like that!Or ask somebody but simple little things can realy improve your singing!
#12June 11th, 2007 · 09:13 AM
50 threads / 12 songs
305 posts
United States of America
Thanks for all the feedback guys, I'm getting a resounding "work on vocals"  So that's what I'll be doing!
#13June 11th, 2007 · 11:02 AM
15 threads / 12 songs
171 posts
United Kingdom
I looked at the chords and I heard the intro and I thought it was going to be pop. Then you vocals kicked in, and bam there comes the indie DIY.
I love the guitar stopping. I like the phrasing on some of your vocal melodies, they catch you by suprise just like that guitar bite.

As for vocals, they aren't great, but they're not half bad (as mentioned above ;P).

I find my vocal performance goes up when there's people present. God know's why but I feel stupid singing to my self :P. But we all know what we can do, practice :P. After all, singing is about being heard isn't it So make sure we can hear . Goodluck.
#14June 11th, 2007 · 04:47 PM
50 threads / 12 songs
305 posts
United States of America
Huh, my vocal performance goes down when there are people there, because I'm extra embarresed, haha.
#15June 12th, 2007 · 05:00 PM
66 threads / 55 songs
697 posts
United States of America
Overall cool song. Nice hooky bridge.

Guitar playing/quality is great.

I like goat's remark about the 8-take vocal recordings. It's a good strategy, and one that I've used more than once...

Looking forward to the final.
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