A boy loves a girl...the boy is first time in love...
the feeling.....he cant describe in words....
so let this music be his speech...
and speak out for him....
to the world...
what happens when u are in love??...
the happiness..
the joy....



hear the song and feel the love within you....

the song is not complete the work is in progresss...
but with your comments i can develop it more ...
so please comment

Work in progress I reckon................
Almost a noodle....
No lyric........yet
no rhythm......yet
No form...............yet
No vote..............yet

ok Hyp

splash ...................

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I find this noodlistic.... 

    quite a nice start.....

          Since it appears to be noodley.....

      I find it close to knightly.... 

   Let me know when you are ready...

     And you can be a Noodle Knight.......

           Jim K

well look, there is a form, there is a chorus and stuff... first of all i found it more sad/mysterious song rather than joy and love, but i dont think thats the point.

I like it, look the dull sounds are quite effective when you are in a dull quiet mood, are they even from a keyboard? sound very computery midi kind of thing, if you get a real keyboard or synthesizer you can use the same sort of sounds but they will sound so much better.

I really liked the intro, the rest of the song was good too

at 0:41, the arpeggio keyboard should definitely be turned down and id like to see the background chords in this section be held rather then hit and faded completely before the next chord... another option is to make another track which also plays the chords but holds them and you can still leave this track which just hits the chords.

ok and definitely get drums coming in at 1:14min, just a doof doof che doof doof che keep it simple, and it will be very effective. Because there is a beat here and the drums will fit and really accent the beats which will make the song more progressed then it was at the beginning. OK and the ending from 3:03 onwards was really to my disliking, i say just end on the first chord of the chorus rather than this unsure and not really final ending, a final and confident ending would close this song off much better.

So im pretty sure this is a lot more mysterious/sad/lost kind of feel, i really like the song but still lots to work on, something very nice can be made with what you have so far.

Also make the last chorus at the end include some background vocals effect, not a real voice, a synth voice make it a bit higher ended chords so it sounds as though there is a bit more life and hope towards the end otherwise the whole song would feel too dull.

Once again, I like it, you said it's not complete, im saying it needs work.. lets give it the work it deserves

i have started working on it..
thanx for all help guys
especially chill!!!!

ur a nice chap.....

Sounds like something from the Life Aquatic soundtrack...Yes - I agree it sounds sad and reflective.  IMO I think I would prefer to hear more of a piano sound instead of the synthy sound...it might make it sound happier.  I want to hear bright poppy drums, and maybe a strumming acoustic...will there be vox for this?

I think this is a nice piece - it almost tells a story. 
Loads of potential, so I look forward to hearing the finished article.
I doesn't need vocals (unless you add a choir doing "oohs and aahs", which would be pretty cool.
I think it does need another sound to brighten it up though; I'd use an acoustic I think.
Nice bit of work in progress........ and posted on my birthday too!

hmm.... cant really say much that hasnt already been said, some good ideas in there but its currently more of a noodle than anything add some structure, take the bits u like frm it, and put the together, cut out the bits you dont need, then add some sort of definate rhythm to it and maybe some more instruments? sounding very...e.piano... maybe some pads in there

hey guys ...thanx for all the comments...i have completed 30%of the song...with ur help...
well yes spoon there are yrics to it...but i cant do the vox...bec of soar throat...well its nice to know that there are people around who take out time to rewiew such experimentals..and help people like me to improve....

thanks guys for all the support!!!!

This is just a basic idea. Work on it. You can get something good out of it.
You did this using a MIDI software or you played a keyboard?

        > Iszil

well i did play a keyboard....it has got the sound like a MIDI....and the recording was done with some hiss....so i did hiss removal....which lead to this type of sound....

Nice, sweet and simple, I like the sparcity at the beginning, however a little repetative without a build in the song. Has great potential though!!!!!

Hey Hyp...just stay with this...it will progress..it has potential...keep at it...cant wait to hear the final cut...

Ralph

thanx for voting flyer and siren,......well ur wait would not be longer than 4-5 days...!!!

heard the song ..slow but the lyrics not upto the mark... sounds childish