good song. might think about a remix maybe let the snare drive the song a little more
mix could be a little smoother and leveled. overall though it's good I like it.

Reminds me of playing Tony hawks pro skater 2. Ah, the good ol' days. Anyhow,
Decent production, though the vocals do come on a bit strong at the start. I like the keyboard aswell.
Not much I can say to help you improve on it, but I can boost your ego slightly.
Cool song, I love it. Your the best artist on Bandamp, infact, in the world, I'm going to go build a shine dedicated to you....(too far...?)
But you only get an 80% ,
Toodles

you say this is your own complete song, but thanks for all the guitar parts someone else....so how is it your own complete song...what did you do?...not my style and the vocals seemed egregiously robotic....not horrible, but not my thang....

You earn the credit for concept and creation.Great colab work and well put together.Found it a little short but sweet.

i remember the size of my pride after i completed my first song

This is really good, particularly for your first go at it.  My only criticism is the drum track. On some of those fills, the notes are too close together, causing a "fake" sound to it.  Beyond that, I think you've done a great job.