I like the song as a song , and I think it has alot of potential.

That said your guitar playings not real bad, just practice this song  over and over again,
until you have it down real smooth. Play it the same way when you get ready to record.
don't back off of the guitar in the harder spots just smooth them out. You have a real good voice that's pleasing to listen too, just need to eq some presence in their, and don't be afraid to let out some more vocal emotion. The song writing is real good(would like to hear it with some more layers of sounds).

this is a cool song yep got potential sure enough 

2 much reverb

Great sensitive song
I love the lyrics in the 2 first verses
the instrumentals fit perfect together so keep on working this song is almost perfect I think

I'd rather have a loose, badly recorded song like this any day over 150 pro-sounding dance "instrumentals" which seems to is all we're getting around here anymore

This is your best song yet by far man. Your voice is much better and the melody is pretty good. I like the use of different instruments but they sound a little lost taking turns playing simple melodies over the same picking pattern. Consider adding something to flesh out the aural landscape -- some simple percussion (bongos, hands against the body of a guitar, anything) or maybe some non-arpeggiated chords on a different guitar or piano -- this will help the song build up more if you add them later.

I like it!

wow this is a beautiful meaningful song.....

great lyrics....

keep it up man.

you have a very nice song here...nice lyrics & vocals also

Flyer

beautiful song... 

what is that other instrument ?

Nice song! Tis lovely. I love all the instruments. Great voice too!

very moody......nice

man i really like this song, i cant hear anything bad in it.
going to go listen to some more of your songs. nice job on this

This is defenetly a beautiful song Wish you could better the recording quality .It is a beautiful piece

thnks everyone for the comments if anyone has time check out the video

http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=3988317230090771951

if you played it clean i would say it was one of the better songs i have heard on this site, I feel it, it makes me feel something. decent voice, goes with your sound. almost sounds davey havoc at moments.