i feel like you need to distinguish the chorus somehow - it's not any different from the verses and i can't tell them apart

the lyrics feel rushed

i do like this line though

"Saturday nights and monday blues"

and the imagery is really good, just slow it down about 10-20 metronome clicks and it'll be real good

poor performance-feels a little rushed-the song structure is great-vocals are good-just take your time and express each word.

Hmmm.....I guess is it rushed. The syllables are not clear either, as if I am munching on something.

well this could be a long debate over production stuff, to get awsome sounding recordings, you need awsome gear usually.  Most people ain't got the dough,
or the connections to the top end studio gear. That is why I try not to be to
 influenced by recording quality on this web site.  I might mention some things about quality but I try not to place my vote on it.  I like the song thats what counts to me.
I've recorded real crappy sounding songs, a couple are up on the web site now.
I used those to improve song stucture, then I go back and record on better gear (I'm
lucky I got friends with gear, cause I sure ain't got the money to buy it).
I gave this a pretty high vote cause you had my toes tappin.