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Triiiiiipy
Aciiiiid
Great imagination
Could be great if the production was better
But I still enjoyed it

I really enjoyed that, you have some truly beautiful visuals going on.
Song is amazing pieces of work, very Hawkwind, in that it's a trippy performance done from the back of a bus.
I would have liked to have heard a few more keywords at least come out clearer in the vocal, to latch on to the story a bit more. Vocal could have been a little stronger and a little more in tune but yet as a wailing trip it sets the scene perfectly.