Old man nearly dead
Thinks , what's all this worry in my head
If I hadn't held on to my past so much
And just done what ever the fuck I wanted to all my life, I'd die a happier man !
Just trying to help.
It sounds like your on to the 'We will rock you' 'young boy kicking his can on the street' story, and sound a little like your talking about some red indian after a while. I like the idea and you might sing it perfectly but it needs a little more poetic depth before it really gels for me.
Thinks , what's all this worry in my head
If I hadn't held on to my past so much
And just done what ever the fuck I wanted to all my life, I'd die a happier man !
Just trying to help.
It sounds like your on to the 'We will rock you' 'young boy kicking his can on the street' story, and sound a little like your talking about some red indian after a while. I like the idea and you might sing it perfectly but it needs a little more poetic depth before it really gels for me.