#1January 25th, 2008 · 12:03 PM
40 threads
165 posts
United States of America
Thanks to You
tonight i am running away
tonight i wanna leave my past behind
Its just bringing me down

there is no way to break free
unless you're with me

the clock is ticking and its running out
I try to think about how things are going to be
no more clouds of sorrow amd misery

you have lifted me up to be me again
I am never turning back
this is just the begining


You made me open my eyes, and look around
I have finally found myself thanks to you
Im letting go of everything that i thought i knew
my past is my past, your the future of me
i know that as long as i have you
whatever, may be, will be.
thanks to you


I have opened my eyes from love's nightmare
I can see myself in the mirror
and as strange as it seems I have known that girl all along
she just had to be set free
you have shattered the past and painted tomarrow
when i see you i see me.

chorus

all that is left is the glass pieces of my memories
and i am finally happy

chorus

thanks to you (x's 3)


*************keep me posted!
#2January 25th, 2008 · 12:45 PM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
Very Interesting
I like this. Very cool song.

'and as strange as it seems I have known that girl all along
she just had to be set free
you have shattered the past and painted tommorrow
when i see you i see me.'

I think this part is pretty smart...

At the end, I find this a bit weak to be a good exit....a bit generic

'all that is left is the glass pieces of my memories
and i am finally happy'


Try this maybe:

Shattered glass turns to dust  
My past is gone
I am happy


This may work better(or something along those lines)
Shattered glass turns to dust gives a more visual taste of what you say
My past is gone gives explaination to the glass and serves as a strong definative statement and gives a bit of finality
I am happy Very simple. Sometimes less is more. Again this is a very definative statement which only helps to close the song.

The 3 Thanks to you's would be cool faded in the background at the end, something heartfelt and simple.

Again, very nice song, I love the concept. Hope to hear it soon.

Let me know if I am full of hot air 

ttyl
-Mark
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