#1January 21st, 2008 · 04:31 PM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
Believe Me
Was for fun....hope you guys enjoy it......is meant to be upbeat
This is a play on bad liars :P


I don't believe you don't believe me
Look into my eyes can't you see
I swear every word I say is true
Why do you question everything I do?
Let me explain it all to you
cus I don't believe you don't believe me
Just hold on baby, hear me through

I had a doctors appointment
I was late and he called so i went
And he showed me the test
Six months to a year at the best
A rare disease I cant spell it now
A cure only a wise man would know

I made my mind and took a flight
Never thought I had fear of height
But I did, I grabbed a chute, I took the leap
My eylids froze of course at ten thousand feet
I didn't see exactly where I landed
I was lost alone, baby I was stranded

I don't believe you don't believe me
Look into my eyes can't you see
I swear every word I say is true
Why do you question everything I do?
Let me explain it all to you
cus I don't believe you don't believe me
Just hold on baby, hear me through

Hours later my body thawed
My eyes were opened, my mind was awed
Trees and plants of the greenest green
There were beasts that've never been seen
Magic vines lift me onto a winged stallion
He takes to the air his masters a'calling

Through the ravine we careened
Faster than light so it seemed
Through the trees, accross the divide
Past boulder, rock and mountain side
Up and up, higher and higher
We stop at the sign: Wise man for hire

I don't believe you don't believe me
Look into my eyes can't you see
I swear every word I say is true
Why do you question everything I do?
Let me explain it all to you
cus I don't believe you don't believe me
Just hold on baby, hear me through

I answered his riddles, followed the clues
He was a smart one I give him his dues
One last task, he gave to be done
Through the dragon a cure can be won
I draw the sword from the stone
It is me and the beast all alone

He blasted fire my hair is singed
His steely gaze leaves me unhinged
With a heave I draw my sword
I take a swing, I cut his cord
The last of his line I am sure
But alas I have found my cure

I don't believe you don't believe me
Look into my eyes can't you see
I swear every word I say is true
Why do you question everything I do?
Let me explain it all to you
cus I don't believe you don't believe me
Just hold on baby, hear me through

I took that piece of beast
It tasted bad to say the least
But I am here now safe and sound
Aren't you glad I am around?
But c'mon baby, don't be so rash
Thats why I forgot to take out the trash!

-Mark
#2January 21st, 2008 · 05:45 PM
77 threads / 45 songs
2,296 posts
United States of America
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Great writing Dusty...the only thing, as you know from our last collab....is that this is prob well, for lack of a better word  to long... but, thats just me...I see the improvement though...keep writing bro...

Ralph
#3January 21st, 2008 · 05:46 PM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
Thanks....was for fun....about 15 minutes work into it 
Also it is meant to be pretty fast....no prolonged notes etc. I can see for music it being very simple but whimsical. Maybe a bit of flute during the story telling and a more serious vibe for the chorus. I dunno. If anyone has ideas feel free to let me know. This could be a fun one.

-Mark
#4January 21st, 2008 · 07:43 PM
75 threads / 4 songs
529 posts
Cook Islands
absolutely amazing :]
Love the end!!!
all around awesome lol
I can see(well hear) it as a fast tune
quite speechless
100% can't wait to hear
#5January 21st, 2008 · 07:48 PM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
Nice to hear. I am working on a track for it. Alot of experimentation tho. May take some time. I have a vocalist in mind, just gotta ask him to take a stab at it lol. thx!
-Mark
#6January 22nd, 2008 · 04:03 AM
77 threads / 45 songs
2,296 posts
United States of America
...
will be looking for a more devolopment to the song in the future, Dusty...cool writing....yeah, this deff is going to make a good fast song down the road..good luck

Flyer.
#7January 24th, 2008 · 10:51 AM
5 threads / 5 songs
327 posts
United Kingdom
dusty...(nooblet) lol.. i am real impressed with this story line of a song..its got a great chorus and a feel of a fantasy kind of feeling yet brought into reality.. its amazing.. wow! i love it.xxxx
#8January 30th, 2008 · 02:27 AM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
wowsers!

thx all for your comments     
#9January 30th, 2008 · 10:23 AM
40 threads
165 posts
United States of America
None To Shabby
I really like they story line and i think it makes a great song. I really like the chorus....its nice.
Great Job!

~*~Sarah
#10May 11th, 2008 · 12:15 AM
27 threads / 2 songs
179 posts
Canada
sorry, a bit outta the picture lately...writing 2 novels atm and alot of work to pay the bills lol.

Thanks Sarah for the comment. I appreciate all your comments. More to come soon, maybe shorter with more hook to it. Got about 3 banging around my head atm.

Thanks!
-Mark
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