#1July 5th, 2007 · 08:59 AM
5 threads
2 posts
Ireland
Hide Behind A Smile
I'm gonna scratch your surface
I'm gonna peel off your skin
So I can find the person
Who is hiding within

I'm gonna smile so big
So that everyone can see
And everyone will think
That i'm so happy

'Cause when you're screaming on the inside
But you're heart won't let it out
You can scream on the inside
But no-one will find out

If you're scared
Don't leave me standing here
Come and talk to me
I'll always be here

I can always help you
Through the worst
But if you hide so deep
You'll lose yourself

'Cause when you're screaming on the inside
But you're heart won't let it out
You can scream on the inside
But no-one will find out

'Cause when you're screaming on the inside
But you're heart won't let it out
You can scream on the inside
But no-one will find out

oh, oh, oh, oh

I dreamt I could fly so high above the cloud
But I left those dreams behind me
'Cause dreams are never real
Unless you do something about them

'Cause when you're screaming on the inside
But you're heart won't let it out
You can scream on the inside
But no-one will find out

Oh, oh, oh, oh, oh
#2July 5th, 2007 · 10:13 AM
340 threads / 59 songs
4,344 posts
United Kingdom
I'm not one for the ends of lines ending in the same word.
Probably because I read it as a piece of poetry first, and then it doesn't flow!
But as a song it might work, indeed!
#3July 6th, 2007 · 12:18 AM
128 threads / 44 songs
2,814 posts
Puerto Rico
I agree with Kings Great solid flow in the beginning ,it holds a strong lyrical rhythm but as it progresses it loses a bit of continuity and the flow is bit more superficial.But it might work perfect for a song and definitely shows some witting skills.
Good Job
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