Who would have know it
To end up this way
And I would have left you
in so much pain
here between life and time
as you dance with the devil devine

so take your time
deep in sin
an error from the beast within
an animal in evil consumed the angel
let her go let her go I say

I feel the ice in your touch
as you scream out to me
"this is too much"
I'm here to save you
keep holding on

so take your time
deep in sin
an error from the beast within
an animal in evil consumed the angel
let her go let her go I say

let her go
I cant stand to see the pain in her eyes
let her go
and feel the emptyness of all her lies
who can save this angel from her past
(need 1 more line here)

so take your time
deep in sin
an error from the beast within
an animal in evil consumed the angel
let her go let her go I say

Cool! You haven't been doing any séances lately have you?  

I think that 'ice' and 'scream' are too close together, they make me smile in what is actually a beastly serious piece.
'I cant stand' is strange because you are standing up for her ....' let her go let her go I say'!

As the missing line :  " let her fall into my arms at last " ? or " Who will untie me from this mast? " ? or  " I've held her heart, these words are cast " or even " When I'm the key from which the die is cast "  ?? 

So yes, this is an inspiring piece, hope you can make it a song and get the message through!

Let Her Go!

Who would have know it
To end up this way
And I would have left you
in so much pain
here between life and time
as you dance with the devil devine

so take your time
deep in sin
an error from the beast within
an animal in evil consumed the angel
let her go let her go I say

I feel the hate in your touch
as you scream out to me
"this is too much"
I'm here to save you
keep holding on

so take your time
deep in sin
an error from the beast within
an animal in evil consumed the angel
let her go let her go I say

let her go
I cant stand to see the pain in her eyes
let her go
and feel the emptyness of all her lies
who can save this angel from her past
When I'm the key from which the die is cast
 
so take your time
deep in sin
an error from the beast within
an animal in evil consumed the angel
let her go let her go I say

woops i posted the new song and didn't thanks kings dude i love ur stuff thanks !!!!
                                  music is life
                                  silent slaughter

Very good, very good indeed.

 

Yes, I like this even though it scares me! Lol kings, Ice cream, I only noticed it when you mentioned it, so, first impressions as amusing for me 

Nice work ss, keep em coming!

Cheers

WB

WB! lol Sung it might be ok as a lot of lyrics are but as i read it , it was funny!
Yes Sirsilentslaughter keep it up.

thanks guys I've got all night and i plan to rite

ok do you guys think that the verses should be combined and i add another 1???

I'm going to try and record this
weekend or so but does any1
have a simple chord progression
they think this would be good to?