the verses aren't right.. but the chorus is solid..
was inspired by alittlepaperdoll last week when
she was alone in the chat room for a bit..


Lil Paper Doll


won't somebody play with this little paper doll,

I'm laying on this old oak stand,

'neath the telephone in the hall.
(under)

I kept climbing up the hill,

when my heart began to stall,

Won't you please play with this little paper doll.




I remember in the old days, when I was waiting to be cut out.

I would bring smiles to some little girl, of this I had no doubt.

we'd spend many a happy hour till she learned what life's about,





won't somebody play with this little paper doll,

I'm laying on this old oak stand,

under the telephone in the hall.

I kept climbing up the hill,

when my heart began to stall,

Won't you please play with this little paper doll.



I then became a bookmark, in her little blue bible you see.

but one day she grew up, and she needed to be free.

Now I lay in this hall wanting someone to play with me!

solid chorus i like it!
thanks for all your help on poinsoned by desire
the band is gonna
hit it this week
thanks

hey no worries bro... break a leg with the band!!!
just remember, the best thing is always solid
practice..

blueyes

ha ha ha !

I made a track for lilpaps some time ago, but I doubt these lyrics would fit to it. It would be cool though, to try, but I'm not gunna sing!

and why not try to sing it bro? hey just gimmie some sort of
recorded version of the tracks and using these words, the
tune - melody you have in mind.. nutting fancy, just drop
it in an email to me in a wav file if nothing else. i'll try or
get one of the other two vocalists here to try and if was
can't do it justice, will send it back to you then..  (will tell
ya how bad we crashed and burned) that way if we get
there, we get there.. this chorus has a very distinct old
thirties - forties big band ballad type feel the way I was
doing it.. bet everyone would hear my version and try
to label it "country"..  to bad they can't hear me ticking
my blacks&whites when i am here practicing and jamming..
LD will testify I have a very strong jazz influence..


blessings,

Dan - Blue

No I cant imagine a Prime PX Production with these lyrics ! 

What exactly do you mean with "we'd spend many a happy hour till she learned what life's about,"?
I'd say shes done the right thing anyway! lol

lol i feel so loved, people writeing songs and makeing music fore little ol me lol. i know basket case did one fore me a while back and then puppy and now blueeyes lol. you gys are so great

grrlfriend, there's just sumptin bout cha that makes
us wanna "coddle" ya and protect you like a lil
sister.. seriously, there is just something about your
personality that is enthralling and capitvating... even
when you're in a bitchy mood, it doesn't seem to
spill over on everyone else.. just the person that
deserves it..  Now I said coddle as in mother hen
type, not cuddle.. Just don't ever forget there is
something to you grrl.. and it isn't defined in
others, but in you!


Blessings,

Blueyes..

p.s. it's BluEyes with one e baby!! ;-)

I like this, but I think I would enjoy this more as a poem rather than a song.
I feel you can get more inspiration with the words "won't somebody play with this little paper doll" rather than sung. I think that this would be better as a poem because I feel like this is a very dry, inwardly depressed lyric, and it would require a VERY particular emotion to carry into the voice to keep the original intensity.
When you say the verses aren't right, I can see they seem a little  awkward around the chorus, so, a poem would allow more creative influence to take control, rather than be music bound, restricted to a melodic balance.

I still think it's pretty sweet, very poetic, and that's what I'm feeling from it. It may make a great song, but I'm feeling the words as a raw poem rather than a song.

Cheers

Nice one blueyes

WB

You may very well be right.. but I'm going
to at least give it the ol college try... you'll
be able to hear the full emotion in my voice..
one thing us swampers have, that's the true
soul of that north alabama blues mind set..
Hey, didn't ya know the father of the blues
was born in florence, al.. W.C. Handy!!
and long before Barry Gordy got out of
the navy, returning back to the little yellow
house in detroit, aretha (who wasn't the
first either) came to Florence, Al. to Florence
Alabama Music Association - F.A.M.E.
recording studios to record one of her
first albums.. but as I said, several had
already been to the shoals and had forged
a sound that later in the fall of 1958,
Barry Gordy would go on to plagiarize
and dub it "The Motown Sound"... sure
motown is a moniker  belonging to detroit,
but that hot soul sound came out of three
places.. Memphis, North Alabama and
deep in mississippi and louisana!!! but hey
mr. g. has done well, and pray he continues
to! Long Live the legendary studios and
facilities that helped to really set the roots
of it all!!

lmao
wow
i was just going through the lyrics forum for old times sake and i found this again
and found all the replys lol
wow u guys
i sure as hell miss u
and blueyes
get ur ass online sometime sweetheart, and save me some of that good old hometown luvin ;]

god i miss u guys