#1April 21st, 2007 · 01:07 AM
91 threads
73 posts
United States of America
What is This Life that You're in?
you're sitting there like you've got something to hide
but you wont let it out
you'll keep it bottled up inside
you stutter and stumbel when someone looks you in the eye
and you wonder why

every single days the same
your crumpled up and feeling really lame
and when the moment came
to let it out
you kept it in
with out a doubt
what is this world that your in?

and you feel the same everyday
lost for words, cant find what to say
well that's a price that you will pay
so you dont say what ya wanna say
not today
and you think

every single days the same
your crumpled up and feeling really lame
and when the moment came
to let it out
you kept it in
with out a doubt
what is this world that your in?

would it really be that hard?
if you let it out, well that's a start
you've been bottled up way to long
and now you're getting weeker
you're not as strong

and so you wanna scream
this is maddness
or so it seems
you wonder why

every single days the same
your crumpled up and feeling really lame
and when the moment came
to let it out
you kept it in
with out a doubt
what is this world that your in?
let it out
keep it in
this is where
it all begins
getting rid of all your sins
what is this life that your in?
#2April 25th, 2007 · 06:07 PM
340 threads / 59 songs
4,344 posts
United Kingdom
I really like this, I like it enough to want to comment :

"your crumpled up and feeling really lame" , I think 'really' is too much in the line. 'real' would work. But I hear a lot of possibility's with; crumbled - stumbled , feeling, really, reeling.
They are but words but put in the right place at the beginning of the second verse they could make it role beautifully.
I feel that "with out a doubt" is misplaced/misworded, is it not doubt that creates a situation where someone 'misses' the moment?
'Spelling out' the last line sounds better, 'what is this life that you 'are' in?'

I still like this a lot, it's a bit repetitive but it brings it through nicely!  it's message that is!
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