ok this is my first crack at this so... be honest please..it will start out slow maybe with an arpeggio and then at the end speed up and get louder!!! this is just the first verse im still working on it now im just soo excited about this

This is the anthem of rebelion
providing support for the troops
the chances are one in three billion
our mission will succeed
and then and only then will you heed these words
and then and only then will you heed!!!   

Nice start, I feel slightly angry now though...
Kind of reminds me of Anti-Flag with a gun-wielding rebellious tone.
If you keep this up for the rest of the song then it should turn out quite good.

Cheers and good luck with the rest of it.

WB

thanks for your praise i really enjoyed writing this im sorta emo these days and i really like it recently i have been introduced to the world of the anarchist cookbook (wich btw is the awesomest book ever) and it has provided loads of phun but any ways i was going for the anti flag/rebelious tone im getting free this week so next week i should have the final song posted (maybe)

opk im now re-thinking this verse to make it sound beter maybe something lik

This is the Anthem of Rebelion screaming in your face
You tried to put us down but much to your disgrace
we triumphed over your evil and we're standing in this place
waiting for you to make the next move

thats all i have now i've got to leave school i'l post wen i get to church!

Why don't you write in the same 'proper' way as you write poetry?

Why don't you stick the two together? The first one first, a big gap and then this second one last, it's an excellent ender "waiting for you to make the next move"....punk! lol
'The gap' you've got to fill in with more of the same!!!

Wot no Moosic?  

So whats phun about 'The Antichrists Cookbook'? it sounds dead interesting!

HHHHMMMMM.... stick the two together and in the gap a chorus or is that the verse? End with waiting for you to make the next move and then a big guitar solo.. cool thanks king i didnt think of that your cool i thought i would get my butt laughed out of her...so thanks

I'd laugh at you if you were a monkey!!!

But if you have something to say, I'll listen!

Thought of anything to fill the gap yet?