#1March 16th, 2007 · 05:34 PM
2 threads
Serbia and Montenegro
LOVE BETWEEN SHADOWS
~~LOVE BETWEEN SHADOWS~~
(©2003. Power Lines studio)

It's getting sometimes
I don't know - how to stand
My restless heart it's hard to land
Walking on the thin ice
Life's been always a loaded dice
No one can tell what tomorrow holds
Even where this pigeon belongs

There's a line that you cross
When you're feeling so blue
Between love and hate
Where sinners and saints don't relate
Where broken hearts reside
It's love between shadows
Where moon is just a sun at night and wind is air
That we breathe
In love between shadows

Faded moments of glory days
Never satisfied,
Our passions, our pain
Just like hard 'n' heavy rain
It's a human curse
Forefather's relic entombed deep inside
A God's gift chained to a broken dreams
It's love between shadows.
#2March 17th, 2007 · 09:31 PM
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Cymru (Wales)
This is pretty dramatic I must say, and I do like it, it just gets stronger and deeper.

"Even where this pigeon belongs" is really odd and well out of place.

I like these two lines and what 'I think' they mean but I do think they still sound grammatically off, even if they are intended to be so.
"Forefather's relic entombed deep inside
A God's gift chained to a broken dreams"
So there's only one Forefather's relic, and if God is God with a capital Gy then "A Gods gift..." sounds condescending towards the "gift", and to be honest with you, what ever you believe in I wouldn't be condescending to the actual 'gift' form 'God' even if it did cause my life to be hell!
And I think it's a 'broken dream' not 's'.

So if you can deal with a little criticism then please post more, to be copyrighted they must be very important.

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