My Light Is You

There's a Song From Within My heart,

Love that is burning, just a spark.

The Flame grows steady, bright and true,

This warmth I feel, my light is you.

  
Through a song, the Poets Dream,

In your soul, your eyes a gleem.

Soft words are spoken, a flash in time,

for eternity, two hearts entwine.


With wings on wind, Doves fly so free,

Whispers of a sonnet, that comes from me.

Deep in my heart, this feeling's true,

A song of love, My Light is You.


   copyright - Danny L

Ahh, very beautiful. Nice clear message, good imagery.
However, one line...
"Soft words are spoked"
Spoken?
Also, just an idea here, may not fit with the music, but, how about in the second stanza with the first 2 lines:
"Through a song, with poets dreaming,
In your soul, your eyes are gleaming."

Nice stuff man, flows well.

Cheers

WB

oy vey..  thanks too!! I just feel so stoopid most of the time.. I am a retarded genius and an intellegent idiot!!

thanks for the suggests too my man.. considering the gleeming..  not as staunch poetic as was intended.. but does give for a new flow..

blessings,

Dan

Yes! Really nice, I like it a lot. It is short 'for a song' but what there is so far is the tops.
You keep the theme of the concept of the song being the light (and vice verca), Love it.

WB, I must disagree! 'Poets dreaming' is important, but nothing and no-one is as Great as 'The Poets Dream!'
Which it's self comes through the song!

I see guitar avatar but I see no music!!!!!