ok, this is a work in progress, but im not too sure about the first few lines, (ill address it after the lyrics.)

He had love in his eyes and lust in his heart
she couldnt see him for what he was
He made her promises he would not keep,
but she was a wishful thinker.

& when it was over
& when he was gone,
she knew what he had done.
He had tricked her heart
He had tricked her soul
He had tricked her into believing.

& now she knows
forever is just a phase in her life
& now she knows
together is something we say when its not right

i have more, but that part i can work on on my own. =]
so, the first line-should it be 'love in his eyes & lust in his heart' or 'lust in his heart & love in his eyes.
the second line-whenever i sing it it comes out 'couldnt see him for what he was for.' does that make any sense?
the third line-should it be 'promises he would not keep' or 'promises he would never keep'

I think it should be :

He had love in his eyes, desire drove his lies
she could not see him, for the cloud he was in
He made her promises, he Could never keep,
but she was such a wishful thinker.

The second verse did make me look for rhyming variants of 'tricked'!

But I really really love the last verse, this bit in its self conjures an epic! 

I like the first verse alot. The way it is. Yeah, I think that makes sense. I like promises he would never keep more.