| Where Will you Be |
i really liked you
but you dont even know me
i feel like such a fool
you already hate me
but really your the tool
because you think you're cool
but you're the one who's a fool
blast to the future i will
give you a call
it's a deal
and see were you've been
are you living in the trash can?
what do
you expect from me?
a crumby job
with no life
ohh yeah thats were i'll be
but as for you
three years from now
where will you be?
i see you
you're looking down at me
now its you too
you got all your friends against me
but you know what
i dont even care
if i reach the bottom
i'll know, that you're already there
blast to the future i will
give you a call
it's a deal
and see were you've been
are you living in the trash can?
what do
you expect from me?
a crumby job
with no life
ohh yeah thats were i'll be
but as for you
three years from now
where will you be?
at least i'm not like you
with all your friends
you look like a bunch of fakers
you say that you'll have the same life till the end
but kid, you daddy wont always be rich
you make me so so sick
later on in life you'll be such a slacker
your just a thing we ignore, a dumb computer hacker
trashcan on the floor, a pitiful disaster
cries to sleep at night when he never got it right
cause you never realized, it doesn't even matter
blast to the future i will
give you a call
it's a deal
and see were you've been
are you living in the trash can?
what do
you expect from me?
a crumby job
with no life
ohh yeah thats were i'll be
but as for you
three years from now
where will you be?
but you dont even know me
i feel like such a fool
you already hate me
but really your the tool
because you think you're cool
but you're the one who's a fool
blast to the future i will
give you a call
it's a deal
and see were you've been
are you living in the trash can?
what do
you expect from me?
a crumby job
with no life
ohh yeah thats were i'll be
but as for you
three years from now
where will you be?
i see you
you're looking down at me
now its you too
you got all your friends against me
but you know what
i dont even care
if i reach the bottom
i'll know, that you're already there
blast to the future i will
give you a call
it's a deal
and see were you've been
are you living in the trash can?
what do
you expect from me?
a crumby job
with no life
ohh yeah thats were i'll be
but as for you
three years from now
where will you be?
at least i'm not like you
with all your friends
you look like a bunch of fakers
you say that you'll have the same life till the end
but kid, you daddy wont always be rich
you make me so so sick
later on in life you'll be such a slacker
your just a thing we ignore, a dumb computer hacker
trashcan on the floor, a pitiful disaster
cries to sleep at night when he never got it right
cause you never realized, it doesn't even matter
blast to the future i will
give you a call
it's a deal
and see were you've been
are you living in the trash can?
what do
you expect from me?
a crumby job
with no life
ohh yeah thats were i'll be
but as for you
three years from now
where will you be?
"blast to the future i will", you've been nicking lyrics again! This time from Yoda! 
You can write, I'll give you that. And you do a lot too.
I suppose if you just keep it up, the writing its self will find a way out.
You see I really think your subject matter is getting a bit tedious.
You seam to be stuck in a (fairly intelligent) girlie rut.
I even feel I could write a 'classic' Bee song :
Your so cool
Your everything
Your so wonderful
Whan you smile the clothes you ware.
But your not
Your jerk
I'M Wonderful
And I'm better than you
You'll see
When you dont see me!
I know I'm sarcastic, but are you getting my drift?
Except for your Obsessive Fan, most of your work until now is on there themes.
What I'm trying to say is that you can write, so broaden your horizons.
I mean, even if you do love yet another older boy, it's illegal for him to look too close so he's probably rightly ignoring you!
And if you give me simons old excuse of 'projection into the experience' I say to you that I wouldn't want my children to listen to songs that are just 'inner conflicts', I'd rather they listened to songs that helped them see the way forwards in their lives.
Know what I mean?
You can write, I'll give you that. And you do a lot too.
I suppose if you just keep it up, the writing its self will find a way out.
You see I really think your subject matter is getting a bit tedious.
You seam to be stuck in a (fairly intelligent) girlie rut.
I even feel I could write a 'classic' Bee song :
Your so cool
Your everything
Your so wonderful
Whan you smile the clothes you ware.
But your not
Your jerk
I'M Wonderful
And I'm better than you
You'll see
When you dont see me!
I know I'm sarcastic, but are you getting my drift?
Except for your Obsessive Fan, most of your work until now is on there themes.
What I'm trying to say is that you can write, so broaden your horizons.
I mean, even if you do love yet another older boy, it's illegal for him to look too close so he's probably rightly ignoring you!
And if you give me simons old excuse of 'projection into the experience' I say to you that I wouldn't want my children to listen to songs that are just 'inner conflicts', I'd rather they listened to songs that helped them see the way forwards in their lives.
Know what I mean?
I know, I'm sorry Bee, but when I see good talent doing the same old thing I get kind of wound up.
The other side of this is that Our Queen Bee seams to be able to post loads but comments very little so I've come to a point where I think that I might as well be truthful! what the hell it's only a smell!
After posting this afternoon I did come up with another way of putting it :
"at least I'm not like you
with all your friends
you look like a bunch of fakers
you say that you'll have the same life till the end
but kid, you daddy wont always be rich
you make me so so sick
later on in life you'll be such a slacker
your just a thing we ignore, a dumb computer hacker
trashcan on the floor, a pitiful disaster
cries to sleep at night when he never got it right
cause you never realized, it doesn't even matter"
This is not a song! This is just a load of insults made to rhyme, done by someone who is saying "I'm frustrated as hell".
So Bee if your trying to write something for a 'new generation' then let me say this from a different generation : The song can take your frustrations and all but if you want the song to carry on, I think, you'll have to learn how to write in a way that your audience can take what you want to give!
Like commenting here, I've got to do it in a way that I believe I get my message across, otherwise whats the point!
The other side of this is that Our Queen Bee seams to be able to post loads but comments very little so I've come to a point where I think that I might as well be truthful! what the hell it's only a smell!
After posting this afternoon I did come up with another way of putting it :
"at least I'm not like you
with all your friends
you look like a bunch of fakers
you say that you'll have the same life till the end
but kid, you daddy wont always be rich
you make me so so sick
later on in life you'll be such a slacker
your just a thing we ignore, a dumb computer hacker
trashcan on the floor, a pitiful disaster
cries to sleep at night when he never got it right
cause you never realized, it doesn't even matter"
This is not a song! This is just a load of insults made to rhyme, done by someone who is saying "I'm frustrated as hell".
So Bee if your trying to write something for a 'new generation' then let me say this from a different generation : The song can take your frustrations and all but if you want the song to carry on, I think, you'll have to learn how to write in a way that your audience can take what you want to give!
Like commenting here, I've got to do it in a way that I believe I get my message across, otherwise whats the point!
| Listen! |
kings makes a valid point. Also, I'm getting a lot of negative vibes from this. There's a way to get across the hate message, without taking to insults. "I don't even care if I reach the bottom", isn't that a direct result of insulting people? It seems to me that you lack pride in your lyrics. I mean, if kings said something like this to me, I'd know there's something of a "big deal" that the lyrics aren't at full potential, gaping holes in the style more like it. kings' intention in his comment was for you to take it in and become a better lyricist/musician.
When I read lyrics like this, I know how you feel, because I've felt it too, a couple of years in primary school were my lowest times, I wrote a song about it, but instead of taking my frustration out on them, I kind of said, "I'm better than them, I don't have to waste my life throwing insults at a wall", and I haven't looked back since.
Take kings' precious words and make your music into a big deal, otherwise no-one will listen, you won't get to where you want to be.
I do think you have talent, I just agree with kings that you should use it in a way that heightens your potential.
WB
When I read lyrics like this, I know how you feel, because I've felt it too, a couple of years in primary school were my lowest times, I wrote a song about it, but instead of taking my frustration out on them, I kind of said, "I'm better than them, I don't have to waste my life throwing insults at a wall", and I haven't looked back since.
Take kings' precious words and make your music into a big deal, otherwise no-one will listen, you won't get to where you want to be.
I do think you have talent, I just agree with kings that you should use it in a way that heightens your potential.
WB
I agree with kings.
Talent is one thing... And inner conflicts are a source of energy... But try to channel this initial energy to a higher level of inspiration... Don't take the easy "it only took me like 5 minutes to write that" way out. If you take a little longer you can write something more interesting. I'm sure of it.
Talent is one thing... And inner conflicts are a source of energy... But try to channel this initial energy to a higher level of inspiration... Don't take the easy "it only took me like 5 minutes to write that" way out. If you take a little longer you can write something more interesting. I'm sure of it.
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