I tried to capture today's music scene in here, although I don't think this is the right theme for my music, but it still turned out ok.

White Walls

I'm staring at these white walls, surrounding me,
No fear for anarchy, and these
White walls, consuming me,
Take the words right out of me, out of my mouth,

Some thing's going on, I know it's not quite real,
Your words are getting lost, I find they are hard to feel,
Sometimes I lose my sight, I'm blind to what you see,
Someone is losing touch, I know It's not me,

I'm staring at these white walls, surrounding me,
No fear for anarchy, and these
White walls, consuming me,
Take the words right out of me, out of my mouth,

Mother earth didn't want this, your fame means nothing to her,
The inner ear is the innocent victim, These sounds are a punishment deserved,
Sometimes I prefer the silence, to the music any day,
What is this music, what is music anyway?


I'm staring at these white walls, surrounding me,
No fear for anarchy, and these
White walls, consuming me,
Take the words right out of me, out of my mouth,

What are these sounds, coming from the television,
While underground, we maintain perfect vision,
Not free to think, while we are stuck within these walls,
We're breaking out, because emergency calls,

You're stuck on inspiration,
I'm a white wall black with devastation,
Yet you spread the word, and the lies are heard,
I hope you choke on every word,
You're stuck on inspiration,
I'm a white wall black with devastation,
Yet you spread the word, and the lies are heard,
I hope you choke on every word,

I don't know if I like this, this meant from an artistic view knowing that you write good lyrics.
I personally find it difficult to grasp the story and meaning, as there is one given.
I like the chorus and the idea of the white box though again that clear visual connection alludes me!
I really like the first verse, the words are 'open to interpretation' enough yet specific enough to be about something!
The chorus is also 'open' worded, a bit vague yet pointing to the theme.
Then the other verses become very 'specific' using 'narrower' words!
And I also thi...cough! cough! choke! choke! splutter! splatter!.... .. . !
                                                                                     ..  .!
                                                                                       .  .  .!
                                                                                         .. ..  . ... .ghugh!
                                                                                           .. .. ...   . ...  . .thud!

yeah, this one was kind of all over the place, I had a lot of trouble writing it. The structure is much looser rhythmically than my other stuff, and I did find it hard to write on the topic and follow it into a good lyric. My next one will revert back to my conventional, and less direct in terms of topic, and more direct in terms of keeping the focus.

Also, I think you should get that cough looked at, sounds pretty bad... don't want to go around infecting the rest of us!

Anyway thanks for the point of view, I see what you're saying here (once again, you see that I have gone astray of the point), in that the lyrics are vague and blurred and inconsistent (maybe they need glasses!?)

Cheers!

WB

i don't about you but i find it hard to edit my shit i originally penned...
it's frustrating to me...
so i've got a collection of pieces that i haven't tossed simply 'cuz there's
something in there that really caught my senses...
i'm determined someday to rework them into something satisfactory...

ahem, with all that said about my shit, you could always work in some new passages
that have the same flow as the first stanza...
'cuz you do have some great impressions in here...
or perhaps the music can just bring it all together...