HI:) I'm new in this forum but i'm writing songs for a long time and i never showed my songs somebody but i decided that it would be helpfull if other people can give me improvement suggestions

Out oft he fog, a rising star
Broken girl, finding her missing pieces
Black dress turns into white
A barefoot nothing turns into a barefoot cinderella

This is when life changes
This is when the good wins
This is when
Oh this is when life changes

Out of the old, into the new
A supressed girl living her dream
Her eyes sparkling in the spotlight
She’s everything they said she never would be

This is when life changes
This is when the good wins
This is when
Oh this is when life changes

Woah
What ya saying now she’s everything you ever wanted to  be
She’s everything you never deserved

This is when life changes
This is when the good wins
This is when
Oh this is when life changes
This is when, w´this is when, this is when
This is when life changes
This is when the good wins
This is when
Oh this is when life changes

Wow, this is pretty good! Especially considering the mood I'm in, w-o-w

These lyrics are complete as they are, you just need to find the right tune to it!

Do you also record music? I would love to hear it!

And welcome to BandAMP! Although the forums are a bit slow lately, must be the time of the year.

cheers!

Tom

Good stuff ... standing at the door looking back .... looking forwards into the unknown
You have written it as a song, do you know how it is meant to sound?
I like lyrics .... so you can keep on posting as far as I'm concerned  ; )

I really liked the flow of everything, concept is pretty good as well. Welcome to Bandamp :-)

-Sarah

excellent writing again.  lyrics are my hardest thing.  you have a great gift for song lyric writing.