Reading this, I can see the melody moving through it. Nice song, yet again a fine representation of imagery. I'm presuming that "I'm content with providing, not matter the price" the 'not' is a typo and just meant to be no?

Anyway, what can I say that hasn't been said in your other lyrics. I'd like to start hearing songs out of these, if that is possible... It would be great to see how you fit the extensive lyricism (does that make sense?) into a melody, and turn a beautiful poem into a beautiful song...

Cheers!

WB

Jack, it's my first look at your work, and an auspicious piece it is. Wonderfully poetic and cohesive. First rate. Not much of a review, but I want to take a look at some more of yours.

Yes I can hear this as a song, it's less intense as the God series.
The imagery is more accessible.
I hear stories being read as I read your work.
You reflect a lot in your work, whether between words, between lines or the story its self.
I do find it odd though, that its written reflecting on the present moment yet she is not meant to 'hear' what is being said!