| Fond goodbyes |
This is my first post on this forum, so i'll just take this opportunity to say hi to everybody. Hi.
Anyway, on to the song. This is track#7 off of my first album, "The Summer-day Reflection Songs". My brother and i wrote it together about a month ago. It's kind of a sad song as opposed to the rest of the more upbeat folk songs on the album, but it was fulfilling to write because we were feeling the same thing at the time we wrote. Anyway, here 'tis. Enjoy!
V1
Is there any wonder why you think your skies are blue?
Is there any wonder why you think that this is true?
Is there any wonder why your earth has turned to black?
You cut yourself upon the wire, and now you cant go back
Chorus
Say goodbye to sorrow
Say goodbye to tomorrow
Say goodbye, say goodbye, say goodbye
Break my heat and say your fond goodbyes
V2
Caught up in your imagery, my head begins to turn
A victim of your wizardry, my eyes begin to burn
Are you carved into the ice, a patron of the cold?
Or will your heat keep you company, and aid you to grow old?
(Guitar solo)
V3
Traveled to the sun and back, our feet are rough and worn
And hell hath no furry like the wrath of a woman's scorn
But though I'm green with envy, I find solace in my mind
Walking here and running there, free among the pines
Hope it tickles the fancies of someone! I'm not afraid of harsh criticism, so if it blows immortal ass, just let me know!
Peace
Anyway, on to the song. This is track#7 off of my first album, "The Summer-day Reflection Songs". My brother and i wrote it together about a month ago. It's kind of a sad song as opposed to the rest of the more upbeat folk songs on the album, but it was fulfilling to write because we were feeling the same thing at the time we wrote. Anyway, here 'tis. Enjoy!
V1
Is there any wonder why you think your skies are blue?
Is there any wonder why you think that this is true?
Is there any wonder why your earth has turned to black?
You cut yourself upon the wire, and now you cant go back
Chorus
Say goodbye to sorrow
Say goodbye to tomorrow
Say goodbye, say goodbye, say goodbye
Break my heat and say your fond goodbyes
V2
Caught up in your imagery, my head begins to turn
A victim of your wizardry, my eyes begin to burn
Are you carved into the ice, a patron of the cold?
Or will your heat keep you company, and aid you to grow old?
(Guitar solo)
V3
Traveled to the sun and back, our feet are rough and worn
And hell hath no furry like the wrath of a woman's scorn
But though I'm green with envy, I find solace in my mind
Walking here and running there, free among the pines
Hope it tickles the fancies of someone! I'm not afraid of harsh criticism, so if it blows immortal ass, just let me know!
Peace
Must agree with jack about the harmonies, sounds wonderful!
On the poetical side of things I think the last line is too weak, and even though I like cliche, it's a bit so much cliche it becomes empty! Looking at it now, to be honest I think the whole last verse is weak.
First line is good, then you use a well known saying, it does fit and is ok, but then you go struggling for an end, and being all green and running free hear and there among pine trees is not it!
And maybe you could have even gone a bit deeper than "grow old"?
I wouldn't say this if I though for one second that the rest of the song was not worth it!
And you do say you don't mind a bit of harsh! Ooo!
On the poetical side of things I think the last line is too weak, and even though I like cliche, it's a bit so much cliche it becomes empty! Looking at it now, to be honest I think the whole last verse is weak.
First line is good, then you use a well known saying, it does fit and is ok, but then you go struggling for an end, and being all green and running free hear and there among pine trees is not it!
And maybe you could have even gone a bit deeper than "grow old"?
I wouldn't say this if I though for one second that the rest of the song was not worth it!
And you do say you don't mind a bit of harsh! Ooo!
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