I like it, it's a simple young pop piece.
I like the simplicity of the 'boy' and the 'girl', I've used it my self a few times.
I'm not too sure of 'and then she'd turn around' sounds weak yet I do see that you change the meaning of the same chorus just by changing a few words in the sentence, I like that too, it keeps your listener listening. And it shows that you, the writer, know the words you write/sing about.

yup... I like it too. I've read some of your lyrics, bee (and some of the comments to them) and I would really like to actually hear them put to music some day soon (the lyrics, not the comments ). this piece particularly would fit to a fast pop-punk thingie like avril lavigne, so I was just wondering if you are in a band, if you have a way of recording your ideas, etc.

ummmmmmmmmmm

I'm not being accusatory here...........but...............

well.......... http://www.seeklyrics.com/lyrics/Avril-Lavigne/Sk8er-Boi.html

this seems eerily familiar.

In the "paranoid" thread, I referred to this borrowing from Sk8er Boi. The first two lines of the chorus, and a more general version of the story.