#1December 17th, 2006 · 08:46 PM
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a pictures worth a thousand words
if a pictures worth a thousand words
please let me be your first
i suffer from mental blindness
and now its getting worse
so slowley the same images self repeating in my head
if i dont see something interesting soon
i'll surely be dead

black and white
win the fight
so its all i ever view
please, this is getting boring
let me see somthing new
sounds of the waves are crashing in my mind
thats all i remember before i left it all begind

it will take some time to get over you
it will take some time to find somebody new
if i gazed into the future
what could i see
the last thing i would like to observe is you with me

if a picture's worth a thousand words you'd probaby be my first
since we're been apart my words have been so dull
these boring photographs sitting in my skull
the colors will come back to me
if i forget you now

i've been working on an equasion
but i dont see how
its possible to remove these images from my mind
i havent found a solution so they'll be here for sometime

if a pictures worth a thousand words
you'd probably be my first
in the beginning you were my love
now you are my curse
you've profected my fear here today
just because its over doesnt meen the feelings go away

i painted a portrate of a boy i once new
with hair of golden brown
and beautiful eyes of blue
those eyes hold an eternity of experience
and i cry because your change was so mysterous
in the end its ok because i accept the fact
that all it is is a picture that i wont be getting back

you're out of my mind and i can finally see
all the colors as they surround me
as i try to get you our of my mind
so i will be able to finally see again
#2December 18th, 2006 · 02:54 AM
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Cymru (Wales)
I like this a lot.
Very intelligent, I like the image of imagining woven into it.

I take it 'begind' and 'profected' are typos, I usually don't care to mention typos but here I do, they are important words in the piece, and spoil the reading as they are.
Again this one start off really good, some really good lines and rhymes
It does tend to fall back into ,'Its over, go away, I don't want to think about you' again, which you do quite a bit of.
But as I said I do like this one a lot.
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