#1December 13th, 2006 · 10:10 PM
97 threads / 43 songs
500 posts
Australia
Big City
Here are the lyrics to my first bandamp song. The audio doesn't have lyrics, so here they are, try and fit them in if u want, or comment on the words and phrasing etc.


V1
You said, you said, I would, not go,
I went, I went, through the, unknown,
Always, and ever, I'll be here forever,
Always, I know, I'll be, Unknown,

V2
You said, you said, I won't Show Up,
I came, I came, now you, shut up,
always, and ever, I'm ready, to step up,
always, I know, you won't, grow up,

Chorus
These Buildings push me to the ground (yeah)
This city isn't safe or sound (no)
Big city is consuming me (consuming my soul)
Big city claiming me whole (woah)

V3
I know, I don't, Really, like you,
I don't, think I, Want to, see you,
And, I'd, Erase, Your life, From this place,
And I, don't think, I would, Miss you,

Chorus

Interlude
I know I don't really like you, I don't think you care,
I don't think I want to see you, It's rude to stare,
and I'd erase your life, from this place,
And I don't think I's miss, seeing your face,

Chorus

Outro...
#2December 14th, 2006 · 09:38 AM
46 threads / 33 songs
179 posts
United States of America
Love V3. that erasure part is too good. Love to hear it. awe imagery.
#3December 14th, 2006 · 10:55 AM
341 threads / 59 songs
4,361 posts
Cymru (Wales)
Computer game music don't have lyrics. I'm listening to Big City v2 and have my own comments about that but as to putting these lyrics to that music????

I'd sort of like to hear you try!  , and be happy with it and have others to like it to!

I like these lyrics of yours. But they have different music (I hope! )
Feels kind of raw / punk / rock music, not electronic

These are hard raw lyrics, in your face 'fuck off'ish!
Having said that, they do have manners and are maybe too polite a 'fuck off' to put to pure punk!
Punk isn't clever and not usually intelligent, this piece is!

But yet it dose have a punkish 'jump' to it, if you know what I mean?
#4December 14th, 2006 · 07:43 PM
97 threads / 43 songs
500 posts
Australia
kings wrote…
Computer game music don't have lyrics. I'm listening to Big City v2 and have my own comments about that but as to putting these lyrics to that music????

I'd sort of like to hear you try!  , and be happy with it and have others to like it to!

I like these lyrics of yours. But they have different music (I hope! )
Feels kind of raw / punk / rock music, not electronic

These are hard raw lyrics, in your face 'fuck off'ish!
Having said that, they do have manners and are maybe too polite a 'fuck off' to put to pure punk!
Punk isn't clever and not usually intelligent, this piece is!

But yet it dose have a punkish 'jump' to it, if you know what I mean?

Well kings, I first wrote this piece as an acoustic piece and it wasn't meant to be electronic music, as you have said, the lyrics fit in to the raw punk rock, which is what I preffer, but I can't get that across onto bandamp with my current computer facilities, so here's the compromise, just picture the audio review is played with an acoustic guitar, cut out the drums, and pretend the lead guitar is my voice, then you'll have the song as it's intended entirity. As I have said before, I would like to try to put it onto FL, I'll try to get it sounding acoustic, and if the FL vocals don't work I'll post up a challenge to see if anyone wants to sing to it.

Oh and P.S. These lyrics were intended as a kind of closure on my primary school years, when everything was ugly and cruel, sop this is a personal song to me.
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