I fell down into an ocean
I lost my mind and fell asleep
When I woke up I felt new emotions
I'm blinded and I cannot see

Blinded by limelight
Trying to see
Where in the limelight
The reasons could be

And there's a man
I try to speak to him
But it looks like he's deaf and blind
Then he turns, he turns and walks away
And as he walks, he says;
"Go Back! Now!"

Why would I go back?
Even though the limelight is blinding me,
I still can see
What I am becoming
But I cannot stop it myself

Blinded by limelight
Trying to see
Where in the limelight
The reasons could be

I like this.

I get a feeling that if you were to sit down, meditate on what you've written and try to write the rest you'd end up with some kind of LedZep deep mystic dream rock ballad. 

I'd love to know what more happens it this dream!

I'm that dude, babe! "Go Back! Now! and finish it off!"

That last line... in print is just sort of hangs there ... kind of exciting. Makes me wonder what the song will sound like. Do you have music for it and will you record and post?

I do not have a chorus. And maybe it needs more verses too.
I have written music to it...
well... Maybe I'll record it when I've got the time.

Blending the limelight
Trying to see
Where in the limelight
The reasons could be.

I was wandering around the 'lyrics' and saw you had no 'chorus'.

I like the title a lot. You could definitely draw on it for ideas for the character of the song.
When I think of Blending limelight I think of squinted eyes!

ditto, kings.  i was about to suggest the same thing.  the title is great.  you beat me to using the word "limelight".  i wrote it into a song about a month ago, but you posted first

it`s a little short for standard song length, so, unless you add more words, i definitely wouldn`t try cranking this thing for more than a couple of minutes.  if it goes on any longer, it`ll just repeat until i wanna poke my eyes out with bricks.

uh... the song isn`t bad-- i like the way it feels, but it`s just like a single burst of energy all of the sudden.  it sweet melody on a chorus of some sort, even if the song just simply ends by repeating such a chorus twice, would be great for the listener`s adrenalin.

best of luck,
TLS

makes me think of tequila and lime, yum! Just the title, not the lyrics.

I've read this a few more times. I can just hear it in a soulful wail. Oh baby, yeah. I think this could sound GREAT. I really do.

Wish I knew who the man was.

sounds stargaze, indulged in a fantasy. this sounds good i like it. maybe you should increase the content, making it longer.

That was the idea...
kings gave me a good 'chorus':

Can I use that, kings?

  Of course you can use it you banana!

Their only bloody words after all and these are written with this piece of yours in mind, it was just a simple idea any way.

On the other hand, IF and WHEN you get your recording quality top notch, you are welcome to nearly any of my writings that you like.

With that musical voice of yours and your talent in general it would be really cool to have you want to use something of mine.

And to put it another way, if your looking to extend this or just want some ideas, just ask. I love playing around with words!

Well... Sometimes the simplest is the best!
It fits with the music too.. How did you know that?? 


 

Hey, I didn't think the chorus was such a great idea, and I didn't think it was a real strong chorus. But now that you have edited it in, I really like it. Kudos to Kings for being able to add that, and to Kine for having the insight to see how it would improve his work, and for having the graciousness to accept it. I'm really impressed by that for some reason. Maybe it's because I might be too prideful to do the same? 

Now I know it's just one little bit of collaboration, but how does Da Kine Kings strike you for the name of a band????? 

Naa!
Just 'Kine' in lights,
Kings is someone she met along the way,
I told you I'm that guy!

Kine, I find the last two lines of the edit a bit strange. I wouldn't think that such a magical adventure could be a 'sad' 'tragedy'. And to be honest with you the whole idea behind this song is to invite the listener to experience your 'vision', and wouldn't part of the journey be to realise that you are giving something important to someone? so why turn it at the end and say it's a load of crap any way? Because it's not, it's a magical vision.

Sorry folks... I didn't know that blending isn't the same word as blinding...    So... It's Blinding Limelight