I look so calm,
but if you look a bit longer
You will see that I'm tired like a dog.
And if I fall,
will you help me 'til I'm stronger?
Am I living life at all?

It's too little time for doing all that must be done.
Shaping up, I'm shaking down.
Will I reach it in time?

This is my last call,
This is my last note,
This is my first day of eternity.
There is no hope.
My last note.
This is my first day of eternity.

His eyes are asking;
Why are we here?
The storm is rising, and we have to move on.
My hands are shaking.
Leave me be!
Try to live like me.

This is a call (my last call)
This is a song (my last song)
This is my first day of eternity.
There is no "hope" (only "wait")

This is my life (my only life)
Leave me be (stay away)
This is my last day of happiness.

This is my last call,
This is my last note,
My first day of eternity...

This is really good!
I like the ideas going on in there.

An end and a beginning in one.

This verse is so full of hope yet so painful :

"This is my life (my only life)
Leave me be (stay away)
This is my last day of happiness."

I take it that this is already a song? Is it recorded? Are you going to post it?

Don't Do IT! The only CIDE that is good is CIDEr!


I like how the chorus (I am guessing) when repeated changes. That allows for interesting re-listens. And advoakes messing up when people are singing your song! Yeah!

Hey... you may take it as poetic licence, but since eternity is such, it has no beggining or end, and therefore there can't be "a first day".

You could change it to "my first day of eternity" wich would have more sense, I think.

Good Luck.

This is a song. I have not recorded it yet.
I have written it for piano and guitar. Haven't found out what to play on the bass yet...

You're right! I'm not so good in english. 
Thanks!   
I will change the title (and lyrics) to "My First Day of Eternity"