#1December 2nd, 2006 · 01:42 AM
91 threads
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HOLD MY BREATH
I hold my breath
As I’m flying to it
With no regrets
And no and why
With no loving
But I won’t die


Chorus

Do I have to know you?
Do I have to breath buh-bye?
Things are so stranded

I know
How it is
To know that you are going thru it
With wonders
But there's nothing to it

Chorus

Oh yeahh
Do I have to know you?
Do I have to breath buh-bye?
To get things stranded
And do I have to see you
No there’s not a reason why
Things are so stranded

I hold my breath
As I'm flying to Tahoe
And I'm going thru it
I got no regrets
No more wonders why
Cuz’ we’re just kids
With no loving
And no heaven

Chorus

Don’t take my hand
Things are just too complicated
If I look back I know ill hate it

Chorus

Do I have to know you?
Do I have to breath buh-bye?
Things are stranded
Ohh yeah
#2December 2nd, 2006 · 10:42 AM
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4,361 posts
Cymru (Wales)
I once wrote a piece called "She is bizarre and beautiful, beautiful and bizarre", some how it seams fitting here.

You are one bizarre 'young' person. (now that I see your picture!)

I don't really follow the story, or 'where your coming from' with this poem, but there are some very strong emotions in there.

You have some excellent rhymes, 'going thru it'/'nothing to it',  'complicated'/'I know ill hate it', love em!

Question : what is 'to breath buh-bye'?

So kids these days have no loving and no heaven. pity, because there is a lot out there even in this s**t hole of a world were on. 

Love this verse, its just so hard and to the point, no B.S.
"Don’t take my hand
Things are just too complicated
If I look back I know ill hate it"

I find 'stranded' an 'odd' word, but hey it's your story and creation.

Keep it up!

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