if i told you that life wasn't always fair
or that it wasn't always how it seems
when i need you would you still be there?
or are you to good to be seen with me

chorus:

they might seem perfect from an angle
but when you get up close its all a lie
because they're so insecure and they want to frame you
and you think that there life is just to die

for them life is filed with careless crap
and when you look at yourself
who is looking back?
because when you take a look your just some more books on a shelf

chorus:

they might seem perfect from an angle
but then you get up close its all a lie
because they're so insecure and they want to frame you
and you think that there life is just to die

they think that they're to good for us
and they think that they
re real smart
getting drunk for them is a must
and then their life falls apart

sure marry a rich guy
or join the right sorority
they think that there life's alright
but what they don't know is what people think about them
and then they're so insecure

chorus:

they might seem perfect from an angle
but then you get up close and its all a lie
because they're so insecure and they want to frame you
and you think that there life is just to die for

Bee has at the moment one thread, and this is it.

Hi Bee welcome to bandAmp.

Ooo! your dead hard! and cynical!
Well that's what I get from your poetry anyway.

And who are they? Men in general? Were not all that bad. 

I'm a bit confused between all the 'they's' and 'you's' as to who is who in this piece of yours.

Though it's written to be a poem/lyric it comes over as a story, not that poetry/lyrics are not story's, its just that the style you've written this in makes it seam to 'ramble' if you know what I mean?

I think you've got a good point, a good message and a good story (even if it is about my half of the human race), but I personally feel you could have used less 'and they', 'but then you', 'and you', 'that they'.

If I was a good critique I could write this in away that you would appreciate, but I'm not such a good critique so I come out with a load of "careless crap"

So maybe your right, we are all that bad!!!

I do like this piece but I feel you could have been more ambiguous as the beauty of most poetry is in the meanings and insights the author can weave with a few words.

I'm sure you have more literature, I'd love to read some more of your stuff.