You were lurking in the shadows
Last time I came to town
I saw you shufflin’ through the corridor
Your head was hanging down -
You were crying
I said “Darlin’, there’s no need for you to fall.”

(Chorus)
You got love in your hand
You got love in your hand
You got love in your hand
You got love in your hand

Eduard Shevardnadze kept
Relations warm with France
So many fine Parisian ladies
And he really loved to dance
He could rock and he could samba
Stay out every night ‘till four
When he got home his sweet Nanuli   
Was waiting at the door -
And she was crying
He said “Darlin’, there’s no need for you to fall.”

(Chorus)

I saw the Sainted Lady
She was painted on my door
I saw her draped across my pillow
Saw her splayed across my floor
Like a vision of an angel
Transparent in the dawn
When I tried to see through her
She was already gone -
And she was flying
I said, “Darlin’, there’s no need for you to fall.”

(Chorus)

Flowin like maple syrup on a hot day!

these are graet man....

good story too...

Can someone plese tell me more specific about what they do and don't like about this? I see it as a rock song with strong vocals.

Were talking very intelligent rock here!

Has to be audible, well vocalized.

I know it defies the whole object but as I read I would drop the 'You've got love in your hand'
Its too poo
I think the 'Darlin’, there’s no need for you to fall' is strong enough to carry as far as one wished

Love the first and third verses the second is a bit of a holiday..

I'd still sing it though, as I probably would for most of your stuff

As in I think its a good song but until you prove me wrong I have my own rendition of it in my head.

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWW

Nice work

Flyer

You mean 'intelligent rock' isn't really an oxymoron? 

We all need more holidays!

i like the 2nd and 3rd verses a lot, probably because the 2nd is in a third-person POV, and the 3rd  carries a lot of imagery. 

i like the chorus.  i was at first afraid it was going to be bloody repetitious, but i think i like the way it goes between the verses.

the detail balance is perfect in my opinion.  it`s talking about a lot of ideas, yet isn`t trying to tackle them all into nitty gritty details. 

i`d only say this:  if the melody is too repetitious, then the rhyming might get discracting. though, i haven`t the slightest what the melody or rhythm of the song is, so i could be wrong

XO

Good lyrics! Love to here music to them! I love the ''darlin there is need for you to fall part''...Keep up the good work!
thank you for your comments on my song TIME.
you should check out GRAY NIGHT too!

Kings said he would take out the chorus, but other's liked it. King's also said that the line, "Darlin, there's no need for you to fall" could be taken as far as I wanted. Others also liked that line. It got me to thiniking. Both lines can be used with some repetition to create dualing refrains, or complementary ones, and really add to the dynamics. They can even be interchanged to some degree, as in.

Darlin' - There's no need for you to fall
Darlin' - There's no need for you to fall
Darlin' - You've got love in your hand

I am not going to edit the post, because no lines are really being added or changed. We are just talking about arrangements here. But thanks for opening up my eyes, all! 

Simon - The usual song is made up of words and music, I think we've been here before when I say that poetry must carry the listener with words but in a song a sentence can be sung and the music will carry the emotion that is within that sentence, this is what I meant with 'Darlin’, there’s no need for you to fall.' being a strong enough line to carry its self.

To be honest I still get the same feeling from this chorus, and I think it is because the verses are so intelligent.
It's a kind of "We got the whole world in our hands! Bing Bong Bing Bong Be!" feeling. The chorus is too simple and cliche.

So whether I'm agreeing with your suggestion above or not I'm not sure, I think I am agreeing if the music for the chorus is catchy and spacious, enough for the music to have a chance to 'take/move' the listener once each line is sung.