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I wish i could fall asleep on the couch
Or even just get to sleep
And not dream or wake or have to breathe
Because breathing is what makes you weak
                                                                      2
I think if i fell asleep on the sofa
It would make me sticky and thin
And then we d get ill, or terminate night
Because night is the time we awake

                                                                      3
I know if i crash straight into a wall
All of my bones could break
A risk, though it is, worthy of cause
An effect i am willing to take
                                                                      4
And so if i went and leapt from a bridge
What use would a couch be to me?
Can we sit and take stock of the walls
And the clock, when our bodies are drifting to sea?

Holy hell man

You've got some serious talent.

That verse verse is THE SHIT!

it is nice, cool...n somehow funny at the same time!

I respect the work of others, but this is very superfluous...

could you elaborate, as to how it is superfluous?

I think I am falling in love with ur stuff. God u write some awesome stuff. This is sooooooooooooooooooooooo good.  I am not saying I make any sense out of it or anything. I have noo bloody idea whyI like it.

Verse 1 is so-so, 2 is poor, 3 and 4 are really strong. I think 1 and 2 need some work. They need to be as emotionally strong as the rest, but right now they are a weak setup. Good imagery here, visceral.