At this point this is more of a poem.  I just started it in the last hour and it needs a lot of work. 

In the dark I do not see
what's going on around me

In the dark there are no fears
no new losses
and no new tears

In the dark you can believe
that malice is gone
like sand through a sieve

In the dark I can let go
and I'm the only one to know

In the dark there is no judge
no calls to make
no paths to trudge

In the dark there is no sight
and so no fight
over who is wrong and who is right

In the dark the past has gone
tragedy has left
and the future rolls on and on

In the dark I can make a new light
and have a new start

I think it is a bit cliche. So many writers have written stuff like this so many times.

Stuff like "In the dark there are no fears
no new losses
and no new tears" But thats one mans view.

I did realize that it was cliche.  A lot of it is now that I look at it.  Actually almost none of this is what I wanted to say when I started.  I think I'm going to scrap this one and start something else until I can get my ideas in order.

well...its okay though. These are still pretty good, cliche or not.

it's better than anything I could do---i do parodys!!

cliche
is ok
words of power one has to say
Because the word just goes that way
It flows that way
It sows that way
And would you believe it
It grows that way too

Its like using familiar keys.

Time always rhymes if you care to listen.

Fact: If you want to reach a wider audience, even if they are your deepest inner secrets that your telling the world, you need to make it understood and related too by the many.

I like this type of writing especially if you can get your deepest inner secrets entwined within the so called cliches.

even if it is cliche, it was still good. I like your rhymes.

Yep, it's a cliche, but it's close to being real good. Right now, it's just a vanilla escape - into the dark where everything is as you want it. Give us eight-line verses that tell us more, without resorting to "in the dark" every 4 lines. Tell us what's in the light, what's in you. This is like describing a car wreck by telling us about the bystanders. I want to see the carnage that you hide in darkness. It's there, isn't it?

Thankyou all for the comments.  All of them helped a lot, especially the last one.  Yes, unfortunatly the carnage is there, and thats what I was trying to express.  Thankyou for the advice.