This lyrics are a translation of one of my songs
I need a style corrector, please, let me know what you think


Where have gone everyone else
Inclusive my conscience has left me behind
The darkness in my mind don’t let me see,
don’t let me see, what’s happening around

don’t think that’s why I’m supposed to cry
don’t think that’s why I’ll be waiting for you
don’t think this night I’ll looking for you
don’t think that’s why I’ll be on my knees

One thousand of years of my life I was waiting for you
All the words I said now just make you laugh
That’s why I have decided you must go,
you must go out of my life

You are thinking I still crying
You are thinking I feel defeated
You are thinking tonight I’ll looking for you
But you are wrong, and please forgot me

Nice job Dodo!  I've arranged and corrected what I believe are translation issues....there are some other things that could use some work...like the metre (timing)...we'll get to those later 

Where has everyone else gone?
My conscience, inclusive, has left me behind  (I'm not really sure what you mean here)
The darkness in my mind doesn't let me see,
doesn't let me see, what’s happening around

don’t think that’s why I’m supposed to cry
don’t think that’s why I’ll be waiting for you
don’t think this night I’ll looking for you
don’t think that’s why I’ll be on my knees

A thousand years of my life I waited for you
All the words I said just make you laugh now
That’s why I have decided you must get out,
you must get out of my life

You think that I'm still crying
You think that I feel defeated
You think that tonight I’ll look for you
But you're wrong, please forget me

About that second line, I think dodo wanted to say "even my conscience has left me behind"  because "inclusive" is the spanish word for "even".

Nice lyrics dodo, would like to read the originals in spanish.

hey aeth! thanks for the feedback

The lyrics in spanish are:

¿A donde se ha ido todo el mundo?
hasta mi consciencia me ha dejado atrás
la oscuridad de mi mente no me deja ver
no me deja ver a mi alrededor

No creas que por esto lloraré
No creas que por esto te esperaré
No creas que esta noche iré a buscarte
No creas que de rodillas estaré

Cien años de mi vida te estuve esperando
todos mis ruegos, aún te causan risa
y por eso he decidido tu partida
he decidido tu partida de mi vida

Aún piensas que yo sigo llorando
Aún piensas que me siento derrotado
Aún piensas que esta noche iré a buscarte
Pero ya no, olvidate de mí

Where has everyone else gone?
even my conscience has left me behind
The darkness in my mind doesn't let me see,
doesn't let me see, what’s happening around

don’t think that’s why I’m supposed to cry
don’t think that’s why I’ll be waiting for you
don’t think this night I’ll looking for you
don’t think that’s why I’ll be on my knees

A thousand years of my life I waited for you
All the words I said just make you laugh now
That’s why I have decided you must get out,
you must get out of my life

You think that I'm still crying
You think that I feel defeated
You think that tonight I’ll look for you
But you're wrong, please forget me

the lyrics are really nice. i thought to correct the lyrics but you all have already done so.
is there any tune for it too??

thanks theTeenDream

here is the tune for it

http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/3302.html

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