A song I just finished (with a guitar piece, yay! lol)

I'm tired
Expired
Bemused
Confused

When I think about you
I get mixed up
Wonderful
Thankful

Alone
At home
So prone
Hardened stone
Just atone

I'm tired
Expired
Bemused
Confused

Locked gate
I'll, just wait
Outside
Inside
Alone
At home

I'm tired
Expired
Bemused
Confused

(That better, flyer? :P )

there seems to be a lot of repitition here in your lyrics...

(I'm tired
Expired
Bemused
Confused)

5 times you use this verse.... I think you get the message across that your

tired
Expired
Bemused
Confused


just a little to much Zach...But I give you alot of credit for being creative...keep it up Zach


Flyer

um maybe its the chorus?

No he was right I removed two of them...it was getting redundant lol. And yeah, it was the chorus.

I think it's a nice lyric. Simple yet effective. Not many words, so it stays very transparent.

I like the chorus

Thanks PX, thats the first part I came up with. The lines are short because of the riff I put them too makes them that way

I agree with Puppet. Simple but effective..way to go Zach....lol  yes sir  I think this is a lot better

Flyer

Thank flyer