Although I started writing since I was really young, this is the first real song I ever wrote. It means a lot to me, and made me start writing a lot more. I was 14, and it was like the first song I ever wrote so please don't be harsh.

All these years
I long to be free
I plead in my heart
Release me, release me please

All these rules
Imprison me
My heart screams again and again
Release me
Release me from here

What can I do
Locked inside myself
Dreaming, and losing
My sanity
Repeating, repeating
All of those thoughts
Can't I ever stop this paranoia

Deeper and deeper
Lost in my thoughts
Roaming inside a dizzying maze
Circling, breathing
Searching the way out
But I just scream again

All these walls
Created by me
Constantly built in my mind
Stop me please
Stop me from losing my mind

Again
Am I too far from reality?
Am I too far from sanity?
Am I too paranoid?
Please save me
Help me
Release me
And free me
From myself!

Very nice twist at the end. That's what I call an ending. Keep up the writing, I'll be looking for more

thanks!!!!!!
sadly tho i don't know how to sing to this...

I can think of a number of ways how this "poem" could fit in with a collage of sounds... put to some subtle atmosphere-invoking techno rhythm... nothing too fast, just very.. brooding. .. . and then, nearing the end, getting wilder, stronger, guitars setting in, synths working to a climax...

oohhh yeah.. I can vividly imagine these lines into a song alright!

I like these lyrics

funny that you mention it as a 'poem' cuz when i was writing this i didnt even know what the hell it was...i was just trying to let it out and portray an emotion...

oh and that description of yours sounds so cool..........i wish someone could help me make it into a proper song...  




i was 14