ok i just sat down to get over my writers block and i just kinda spilled this out in less than 3 minutes! lol its alittle ruff and i have a melody for it in my head but i dont have my guitar at the moment since im not home but i WILL deffinatly record this one!!!!! I cant wait!!!! tell me what you guys think its pretty dark its a story kinda about love and this guy (we'll call him James) loves this gurl (We'll call her Sarah) and sarah messes up james life not nesseceraly with drugs but just blowing off his family and everything and he has no one and she pretty much controls him!!! so anyway tell me what you think
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TRAPED(or maybe something about love)(title pending)

im going down
i can feel it all around
your presence
haunts me as i drown
i cant see
and i tremble at the sound of your voice crashing through the wind

not knowing why
not knowing how
im in the dark
and cant get out
not knowing why
not knowing how
im in the dark
and cant get out

can you set me free tonight
who can set me free tonight

set me free
from this sin
from within
i cant breath now
hold me close
 dont let go
and show me how

not knowing why
not knowing how
im in the dark
and cant get out
not knowing why
not knowing how
im in the dark
and cant get out

can you set me free tonight
who can set me free tonight


my love for you
is my demise
i try to escape
from this jail of lies
your tales of love
bound me deep
like a shepord you whatch
over me your sheep

not knowing why
not knowing how
im in the dark
and cant get out
not knowing why
not knowing how
im in the dark
and cant get out

can you set me free tonight
who can set me free tonight

really good!
very deep and a good attack style!
maybe as a good funk maybe jazz-ish song?(or maybe I just have jazz on the mind...)
can't wait to hear it!