#1November 20th, 2007 · 12:59 PM
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Love's NightMare
At night when i close my eyes
I try to dream
A nightmare haunts me
I hold the covers close
And plead for it to end
my mind keeps chasing me
running me away from
what i love and thought was real

[[ WAKE UP
   im falling
   OPEN UP
   im holding to much in
   SICK OF
   all life's twisted lies
   SCREAM AT
   the top of my lungs
   no one seems to hear me
   im drowning in this nightmare]]

When I open my eyes
your holding me tight
arms around me as i tremble
scared it was all real
You tell me its okay its only a dream
images flood my mind
Its only a matter of time
till i have to sleep again

[[chorus]]

I woke up this morning gripping my pillow tight
The tears keep streaming
something isnt right
your arms are cold
they aren't around me
no one to tell me its all just a dream
everything is what it seems

[[chorus]]

and everytime i dream it you die again
and evertime i see it, it tears me up inside
holding the memory of you deep inside
love burns my eyes

your my love, your my nightmare (3xs)
#2November 21st, 2007 · 07:06 PM
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this reminds me of a song that I wrote a long time ago, called Finite Dreams, particularly in your chorus!

hm.. I really like your the lines.... and everytime i dream it you die again and love burns my eyes.  Those are good...

I was afraid at first that this was going to be a little repetative over the nightmare idea, but lucky for you, you didn't overkill it   I like how you focus more on the "you" in the story, particularly from the second verse onward.  I also like the duel-definition of who "you" are... my love ... my nightmare.  When you stop and think about it, that's a terrifying combination...

I hope that you haven't had to experience an actual death of a loved "you" in order to write this... if so, then I'm sure you'd have astounding emotion while producing a full-out track of this...

What sort of style are you going for?  Heavy rock was my initial feel, given what you've written, but I could be wrong.

Looks good!  Hope to see more of you around here!
TLS
#3December 13th, 2007 · 04:50 PM
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165 posts
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Thanks!
Thanks for you comment and reading my song!
It is in the rock genre, and I wrote it a long time ago.
Thanks!
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