WOOT?!! Wisdom and Lyrics??? No 30 seconds of music only???

Yes folks... this is actually my first attempt to write lyrics...the next step will be some reggae riddim on it

Feel free to comment and make adjustments..


Couplet:
Before I met you, I’ve lived the wandering life
My mind was filled with thoughts about good old times
Drifting in a sea of ignorance and immaturity
Time passed me by, and I was falling behind
   
Couplet:
I’ve gone to the bottom of my soul
Tried to line up all my thoughts
To break through the wandering state of mind
To find the origin of absence of energy and drive

Bridge:
Yet, answers and acts stayed away beyond my time
And I realized alone they were not for me to find

[Choir: It left him waiting...] Waiting for an act that would change my way
[Choir: It left him hoping...] Give me a sign to open my eyes
[Choir: It left him wondering...] Tell me what’s my destiny?
[Choir: It left him waiting...] Somebody show me the right way

Chorus:
When I preyed to God for answers
He lend an ear to send me you
As my girlfriend, a mother and my wife
To be my focus and guide in this life

Bob...hows it going Buddy...Nice to see that your expanding on your talents....nice work on the lyrics....keep writing....you will only get better...

I do like

Chorus:
When I preyed to God for answers
He lend an ear to send me you
As my girlfriend, a mother and my wife
To be my focus and guide in this life

anyone in for a collab on this? (specially vocal melody)?????????

It must be a Dutch thing , to want to know the way. I've heard that question so often while living here...usually in English sung songs.
You know you say an awful lot....it's a lot for a chilled out listening mind to take it on one sitting.

To find the origin of absence of energy and drive ..... sounds like Motorcycle Emptiness !    
Or a De Mol burn out ..... 

I'm interested to hear this put to one of your Reggae rhythms.