My flashlight in a little cloud of rain
A symbol of all that does remain
No one's here, they're all gone
I think I can refrain...
I'd hoped this day'd be fun
But I think the rain's begun

Your a droplet in the air
Falling quietly in dispair
With nowhere to go but down
There's no such thing as fair
I think I've hit the ground

Take a rest at the dawn
Critisism all withdrawn
The sound is soft
Well I don't know where
The sound is dead
Dead and gone

Your a droplet in the air
Falling quietly in dispair
With nowhere to go but down
There's no such thing as fair
I think I've hit the ground

The sound is soft
Well I don't know where
The sound is ripe and young
And I think the day is done
Taking down is wrong
I think it might be gone
We're all rained out and on




It doesn't really flow untill you hear me sing it, which I think I might do later, but I just want some feed back on the lyrics. (And yeah, a bunch of people have told me how much the ending throws them off)

like TLS suggested on the homepage: i surfed in to look for a lyric cause my english aint that great, clicked on Rained out, and yo.., i really liked this one..

i found a flow right when reading it, but i agree the end could be stronger

are you gonna change that or not? might have some suggestions, not lines, but ideas..

didnt pick my guitar up yet, dont know if you'd like that?

hope this becomes a song anyway!

good luck

Max

Thanks man. And yeah, definetally, I'd love some ideas!

How about now? I changed it a bunch at the end.

hey those lyrics are amazing....cant wait to hear it! but yeah..the ending could've been better.

Thanks man!

nice lyrics  Zach....I like your determination...will be looking for the song

Ralph_Flyer

Thanks flyer